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When You Pray Is There A God For Me? (a re-post for the lost)
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When You Pray Is There A God For Me? (a re-post for the lost) |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows 
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On these high holy days, you mention casually with mocking cynics' lightest touch, when you embrace them, the structure they provide, a warm and fluid cleansing of soul, the chicken soup of life, do you atone for me? For shared frivolities, dalliances of life and love hopeless dreams, hopeful fantasies precious few realities; when I am gone should you atone for me? Come out come out and play, I make you beg when I am lost so far down inside myself I hear only echoes of empty worlds, bedazzled and bemused beyond the veils of time, will you atone for me? Your guilt is constant soft and deep nurturing while keeping you secure, it moves you firmly like a wave holds you gently in its curl, sometimes with its tide you can swim comfortably, against it you would drown; mine is full of vacillating high cold dusty winds that I ignore choosing to believe they're just treetop whispers in a harmless summer breeze; I live quietly, in mindless empty forests of the self-deceived with arrogance and fear balanced on a point of intellect until some whimsy or my spirit draws me too far from the ground, then, when I'm ripped by ferocity choked and pitted by debris, spun in circles a toy out of control, tossed in crazy patterns by howling gothic winds, do you atone for me? When I no longer think intentionally, when I see only dreams chasing me through sleep needlessly reminding me of lives and loves and lies, debts I can't forget, when I only hear wind and see faces in its folds, can you atone for me? ©2003, 2008, 2011 by icebox |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
too sad.Reminds me; there once were so called "Sin Eaters" are they still around? best to you, jo |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Missed it before but I'm glad for the repost. Could be one of your best, imho. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Yeah, latearrival made me remember I wrote a short story about a sin eater. Tough stuff, ice, that's what make it so good. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Charly, I have only read this exquisite, eloquent, deep and sensitive poem twice so far. I think I have understood it all, but will read it several times more to make sure and/or correct my understanding, after I have replied to it. Nobody can atone for our sins, except Christ who has already done so. He has atoned for all of our sins. Please know that you are exquisitely, eloquently, deeply and sensitively loved by God, even if you don't feel His presence or His touch. It is good to share with us that you don't, because perhaps in the sum total of the replies that you get, you will feel Him love you and touch you. Even if that feeling is fleeting, it will be a moment of bliss, and every moment of our lives is priceless, especially such a one. He who searches sincerely, will find. May you find and bask in God's love for you. Owl [This message has been edited by OwlSA (10-10-2011 03:50 AM).] |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: Such a powerful, impressive, poetically outstanding offering, dear Charly! I believe that we all atone for ourselves in the very moment when we become conscious of having hurt someone through our actions. In this, sometimes painful "awakening to the truth" we mend what needs mending. I also believe that in prayer, as well as in thoughts of love, there is incredible powerful healing energy from which all those in need will no doubt profit. Sometimes I meditate with others in so called "group meditations" and in those occasions we send out this energy of love and wrap the world into it and all the hearts who "are lost". No one is definitely "lost", of that I am sure. Thank you for giving me the opportunity to ponder ...  M |
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