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Nicole
Senior Member

since 1999-06-23

Posts 1835
Florida

0 posted 2011-09-26 09:15 PM

your voice undoes me, every time
i knew it, alive and strong
and would laugh, great gusting peals like a bell;
even pooled, soflty
in my ear, in the hollow curve of my neck
it pulled like a river.
your voice is amber, warm;
it is soft stones, rounded and worn.
i have gathered enough to last a lifetime,
and still the dawn sees me on the banks
palmed hands
white fingers, splayed.
i am little fishes, the green green grass
awash, tangled tendrils and all

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2011-09-27 08:51 AM

Dear Nicole, another wonderfully sparkling gem of a poem!

It's a joy to have you back, Poetess!

Love,
Margherita

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

2 posted 2011-09-27 12:15 PM

You reminisce with a deeper passion than most people exhibit in life. It is a pleasure reading you.

Michael

easy1
Senior Member

since 2010-05-22

Posts 1209
Southeastern USA

3 posted 2011-09-27 12:25 PM

wonderful metaphorical imagery

Nicole
Senior Member

since 1999-06-23

Posts 1835
Florida

4 posted 2011-09-27 07:11 PM

Margherita - That made me smile, thank you very much! It is a joy to be back, definitely. I've been gone far too long.

Michael - It will tear me apart one day, I'm afraid. Thankfully I have friends like you, and a place like this, to let some of it out. Thank you

easy1 - Thank you! I appreciate that

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

5 posted 2011-09-27 08:12 PM

Fabulous description and visuals of sound, which hardly makes sense but that's what it seemed to me, I could actually see the sounds.

Really nice poem~

Amaryllis
Senior Member

since 2010-05-20

Posts 1306
Mi now

6 posted 2011-09-27 10:51 PM

Oh I do love your style! Gorgeous, this.

Best,
Amaryllis

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

7 posted 2011-09-28 03:03 AM

Superb, but aching. Sorry for your pain.

With regard to what you said above, yes, reminiscing like this has, in fact, already torn you apart - but see, you are paradoxically still very whole! I bet you wouldn't have it any other way, but to live as intensely as you do, for though the pain may be greater, the joys are more joyous and colours are brighter. Just when the pain is great (and even when it isn't) look for the joys around you though you may not see them at first (as you have done as noted above - knowing that Pip is a safe place to cry), and you will do OK! Take that from an old woman who is nearly 66!

Owl

Angel4aKing
Senior Member

since 2006-09-27

Posts 1372
USA

8 posted 2011-09-28 03:21 AM

I love it!!! Ecspecially the last two lines....jus splendid indeed!!!

~~~kingsangel~~~

Nicole
Senior Member

since 1999-06-23

Posts 1835
Florida

9 posted 2011-09-28 07:28 PM

BluesSerenade - It makes perfect sense

Thank you for seeing them; I'm so glad you did.

Amaryllis - And I, yours! Thank you very much

Owl - I really wouldn't have it any other way; you are so right. There can't be the bright light, without some dark to allow us to appreciate what we are truly blessed with in life. I'm so touched by your reply, thank you.

Angel - Thank you!

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

10 posted 2011-09-28 08:06 PM

Heartfelt, and rewarding to read such deep emotion.
Enjoyed.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

MorningStar
Member

since 2009-10-26

Posts 290
Pittsburgh, Pa

11 posted 2011-09-29 12:06 PM

This is really lovely. It reads effortlessly. Although, I understand that it's built on an incredible amount of emotion and time. There's no effort when reading it, to be taken right there into the heart of it. Really very lovely.

"I'll tell you how the sun rose
A ribbon at a time..." - Emily Dickinson

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

12 posted 2011-09-29 07:26 PM

Enjoyed...James

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

13 posted 2011-09-30 10:39 PM

i have gathered enough to last a lifetime,
and still the dawn sees me on the banks
palmed hands
white fingers, splayed.

Enough is never enough, is it? Superb writing!!

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