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Nicole
Senior Member

since 1999-06-23

Posts 1835
Florida

0 posted 2011-09-25 10:33 PM

i miss you

little words, round like coins
clamber to the ground;
the dust at my feet.

i miss the seasons
and the grey wanton wishes
as blind and vast as the sea

i remember bending your sky - blue and clear
with my soft words as birds
light with hope and promise
and frailty

i would flesh out verse after verse
after verse, if only in some abstract,
wild hunger
to stave off the blight that keeps us here,
keeps me there

i want the light and the peonies
i want the soft bellies of clouds
i want the lucky fool; still

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2011-09-25 10:50 PM

Sad refrain that I understand quite well. There is a vastness between what was and what is, and what can be. Sometimes, somehow, it can all come together. I hope it does for you.

~~ Those who are silent are the first to be shot. ~~

Amaryllis
Senior Member

since 2010-05-20

Posts 1306
Mi now

2 posted 2011-09-25 11:59 PM

How absolutely beautiful. Gorgeous write!
Best,
Amaryllis

flash
Member

since 2010-11-28

Posts 213
miami beach, florida

3 posted 2011-09-26 01:05 AM

Yes, longing is not imaginary where hunger lives and thirst and ...memory

Someones sky will bend when they come to you...

Thanks for sharing your heartfely moment,

Al

Nicole
Senior Member

since 1999-06-23

Posts 1835
Florida

4 posted 2011-09-26 06:18 AM

JP2 Well said, there is indeed.

Amaryllis - thank you

Flash - True, true; and I just lay it all out there.

Thank you all

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

5 posted 2011-09-26 08:11 AM

quote:
I remember bending your sky - blue and clear
with my soft words as birds
light with hope and promise
and frailty

Oh, this is ever so beautiful, it almost hurts in its emotional intensity.

Love,
Margherita

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

6 posted 2011-09-26 09:23 AM

when a lady weeps her love
she is a goddess...enjoyed this ms

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

7 posted 2011-09-26 03:57 PM

You've expressed such powerful longing... in such beautiful fashion.

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

8 posted 2011-09-26 07:25 PM

Nicole,

Indeed, it has been too long. You've lost nothing in the "fleshing out" dept... nearly fleshing out the soul in this one. That longing and desire brings much to your poetry, don't ever lose it.

I much enjoyed the read.

Michael

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

9 posted 2011-09-26 07:31 PM

Stunningly beautiful and sensitive - and exquisite poetry into the bargain, Nicole.

Owl

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