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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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With feeble steps, I made descent My lack of protest was consent To be subjected to torment I saw too late need to repent In depths of hell I now reside I cannot hide I cannot hide From a minor indiscretion Through most greatly rued transgression Each mistake finds its expression Cracked lips murmur my confession A litany of sins I voice I have no choice I have no choice Broken, bowed by sad narration I beg and plead for cessation From the constant flagellation But face still more desolation All thoughts of better days have fled My hope is dead My hope is dead No matter how much I cajole I am no longer in control There is no way to be made whole Forever suffering's my role And I am doomed to this refrain Of endless pain Of endless pain |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
And now you're breaking my heart, Ruth. Exquisitely sad. ((HUGS)) dear friend. Michael |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
LOVE the way you put this dirge together, suthern, my kind of in your fact poetry. Yes. I'm putting this sucker in my library. Thank you for the read, I thoroughly enjoyed this lament. ~~ Those who are silent are the first to be shot. ~~ |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Ah yes, we all are so close to this desperate place and this Dirge could be our song. But we have a choice to accept divine forgiveness and live, forever. ------- Grace is deceitful, and beauty is vain; but a woman that feareth the LORD, she shall be praised. Give her of the fruit of her hands; and let her works praise her in the gates. ~Pro 31:30-31 JPS (Jewish Publication Society Bible). Excellent write suthern. JL  Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. Maranatha! [This message has been edited by JL (09-26-2011 06:03 AM).] |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Hopelessness and lack of control; I can't think of much worse than that. Such a sad, sad dirge. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Ruth, as a lament this is one of the most heartwrenching ones I have ever come across of. It reflects the depth of sadness and despair that is present in any repenting soul. Great poetic deed! You know my opinion ... the light is stronger than the darkness, there is no such thing as eternal suffering. Love, Margherita |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Michael: Your hugs are greatly appreciated, dear friend... thank you so very much! *S* Jerry: Thank you! I consider something saved to be a great compliment! JL: I think my muse was inspired by "what if" my sins weren't paid for... Thank you very much! *S* Nicole: Thank you very much! Margherita: Thank you so much, sweet lady... you are so generous with your kind words. *S* |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Well tell that muse to cut-it-out... You are way too sweet for that.  JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Ms Suthern. Shall I spank it all better? Very well done lady. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
JL: She's not easy to control! LOL If I try to redirect her, she sulks and withholds words... and I'm rather fond of writing. *S* Thank you so much... I appreciate the return visit! *S* Dark: LOL... I honestly hadn't considered that option! LOL Thank you, kind sir!! *S* |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Suthern, I've read this a few times now... and when something keeps calling me back, then I have to deem IT a  |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
You, Ms. Suthern, have written one of the best poems I've read about despair. Thank you for your poem. You are more precious than rubies, more finer than gold. ms. e |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
(((((((((((You)))))))))))))) |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Well done! |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813 |
ok, I must admit to being a free style addict.....I find very few rhyming poems are readable...but I found myself very much enjoying the style this was written in. The rhyming second to the deepness of thought....oh yes...yes I know this is about you......and I am very good at turning the subject's direction...lol..I very much enjoyed this write about despair...though despair can be lifted with just the right word from a subsequent o&o.... |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
A sad dirge, Ruth, but an excellent poem. Ida |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Sunshine: To be a keeper for you is compliment indeed... thank you! *S* Ms e: When I doubt myself and doubt my words, I'll just read your wonderful response again and again and find belief. Thank you so much... you really touched my heart. *S* Richy: Gratefully accepted... thank you! *S* Krawdad: Thank you very much! luminosity: You are the other half of my teepee, sweet lady... we may lean, but together, we're strong enough to stand. *S* From the bottom of my heart I thank you. *S* Ida: The sadness is what titled it. *S* Thank you so much!! |
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