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Open Poetry #47

i count the minutes

faithmairee
Senior Member

since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

0 posted 2011-01-21 12:01 PM

i count the minutes
as they tick by
one at a time
i am lonesome
for you, my darling
whose life is over
never will i gaze
into your eyes
nor see your smile
no, not again

how shall i go on
will my pain cease
my heart beats slowly
the hours seem long
you would want me
smiling as in life
remembering
all the good times
darling, you know
they were all good times

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

The_Doctors_Angel_32
Member

since 2011-01-14

Posts 337
Florida, USA

1 posted 2011-01-21 12:11 PM

Very beautifully written. I could feel the sadness as I read these words. I enjoyed the read!!!

When the family is together, the soul is at peace - Russian Proverb

faithmairee
Senior Member

since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

2 posted 2011-01-21 12:12 PM

thank you so much...i'm really glad you enjoyed it...

Faith

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

JerryPat
Senior Member

since 2010-10-30

Posts 1991
Louisiana/America

3 posted 2011-01-21 08:15 AM

To write of a loved one who has passed is cathartic they say, and I feel they are right, but it is difficult. You talent shone through on this one, faith.

~ Clones are people two ~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

4 posted 2011-01-21 10:08 AM

very well done faith.
Lori

faithmairee
Senior Member

since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

5 posted 2011-01-21 12:01 PM

Thank you both for your wonderful remarks...I appreciate them very much!

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

6 posted 2011-01-21 12:39 PM

there is a melancholy beauty to this...as well as your apt description of the memory process...not to mention the cadence of your words...expertly crafted

faithmairee
Senior Member

since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

7 posted 2011-01-21 01:07 PM

thank you steavenr...you just made my heart smile

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

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