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JL
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since 2004-04-01

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Texas, USA

0 posted 2011-09-12 09:31 AM

All She needs – is ask

Her love left her at her own front door.
Sweet amours way to say:
No needs to even try
No win for her yesterday, tomorrow, or today…

Her losses are best kept
close abreast,
to forever self remind –
in her own intellect, her loss is but one of a kind…

She peeks out her living room window with hope,
seeking a smile from her promised desire in lieu,
yet she quickly pulls down her bamboo shade
sits on her worn out couch, and reads the daily news.

The headline in bold print reads:
“Woman sickened by a broken heart!”
Her eyes well up she cannot believe
her story is written front page, for all to read…

She whispers her song - sorrowful and deepest of 8 bar blues,
harmonic rhyming her misfortune, oh so true…
She spreads her angel wings, slowly strums her resonator guitar:
With a wish someone out there might remedy her plea…

She turns to the editorial written on page 3:
“Go to your front door and clean up the debris –
the collection of leaves from days, days, and days of past.”
Holding her breath she cannot quite believe.

Could the truth be this simple and as clear as glass?
Letters written in Times New Roman and Bold,
A placard placed in ad full-page and absence of charge:
“All she needs – is ask”
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Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

1 posted 2011-09-12 09:36 AM

Ah, JL...you study people so well.
Putting this one in my library!

"The business of the poet...is to show the sorriness underlying the grandest things and the grandeur underlying the sorriest things." Thomas Hardy

Paul Wilson

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since 2002-07-07

Posts 4711
United States

2 posted 2011-09-12 10:09 AM

JL...Touching write. Enjoyed very much...Paul

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

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Eternity

3 posted 2011-09-12 10:35 AM

Your message comes through very clearly here. Broken hearts seem to abound!

Wise and lovely is the verse referring to past memories which accumulated through time and need indeed to be swept away, to clear the way.

Captivating write!

Love,
Margherita

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

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Louisiana

4 posted 2011-09-12 03:45 PM

She whispers her song - sorrowful and deepest of 8 bar blues,
harmonic rhyming her misfortune, oh so true…

From reading the blues to singing them... you tell such a wonderful tale of dread, desire, hope, sorrow, hope... life. Beautiful work!

JL
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since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

5 posted 2011-09-12 07:51 PM

Sunshine.  Thank you.  Your replies are always uplifting.

Paul.  Humbly sir, I thank you.

Margherita.  I am so glad you enjoyed.

Suthern.  The line you pulled out was the theme.  Actually that was where I started.
                As always your replies are so sweet.  Thank you!!

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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6 posted 2011-09-13 01:40 PM

way cool write, loved it!
Lori

JL
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since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

7 posted 2011-09-13 07:23 PM

Thank you Lori.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

OwlSA
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since 2005-11-07

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Durban, South Africa

8 posted 2011-09-14 02:30 AM

I don't fully follow the content, but JL, the intrigue, beauty, sensitivity, images and concepts (whether I have the right concepts or not) in this exquisite poem, touch me deeply.

Owl

JL
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since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

9 posted 2011-09-14 08:45 AM

Thank you OwlSA for reading and for your kind comments.
Sometimes a little contortion ads flair?
or
An analysis done by an expert can always find the truth in a design.  Unless the expert is the one designing the Titanic.

I guess suthern said it best:
"From reading the blues to singing them... you tell such a wonderful tale of dread, desire, hope, sorrow, hope... life."

Sorry I wasn't a little more clear with the content.  I would make a great Titanic Captain.  ((((ICEBERG))))!!

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

10 posted 2011-09-14 05:40 PM

Nice...James

JL
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since 2004-04-01

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Texas, USA

11 posted 2011-09-14 09:29 PM

Danke! JamesLee.
(German for thank you)...

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

ebonygirl
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12 posted 2011-09-14 11:00 PM

Enjoyed, JL, Ms.E

Angel4aKing
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since 2006-09-27

Posts 1372
USA

13 posted 2011-09-14 11:13 PM

Very cute....yet sad and enlightening at the same time....

I once left what was left of love on my front door.....

still makes me sad to think about the things that shouldn't happen but still do and all the time all we had to do is ask.....hmmmmm

~~~kingsangel~~~

flash
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since 2010-11-28

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miami beach, florida

14 posted 2011-09-15 07:16 AM

JL: truth is simple but you must seek it out and your poem shows the how and the why and the way!

Well said!

Al

ice
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since 2003-05-17

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Pennsylvania

15 posted 2011-09-15 07:19 AM

Paul Simon could make a wonderful song from these words, that are moving and emotional.

JL
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since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

16 posted 2011-09-15 07:27 AM

Ms. E.  Thank you so much for being so kind.
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Angel4aKing.  You are so right.  Thank you for reading and your reply.
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Flash.  Thank you.
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Ice.  Well, from your lips to Mr. Simon's ear.  I hope you know that you put a warm smile on this old guys heart with your reply.  Thank you.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

Martie

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California

17 posted 2011-09-15 01:07 PM

JL...Impressive fabric woven into the heart of this poem....or impressive heart woven into the fabric of this poem. Enjoyed!!

JL
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Posts 6128
Texas, USA

18 posted 2011-09-15 09:21 PM

Marti: Thank you so much for your very kind reply.
JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

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