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JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

0 posted 2011-09-05 08:39 AM

You awake with a start
from a dream so real and divine.
She was there, flesh and blood,
saying sweet things to you,
giving you reason to believe
her lies once again.

She inspired you with soft lips
honeyed breath,
causing you to stand tall,
believing that if she asked
you could flap your arms
and fly.

Lying there among tangled sheets,
heart palpitations almost
lifting you from the bed.
So real, so intense, her presence,
you can't believe it wasn't real
until the alarm clock goes off in your ear.

You continue lying there,
sweat drying, tears falling.
Gripping the sheets in a closed fist,
you try to drift back into that
wonderfully decadence of
heaven on earth if only in your dreams.

Not to be. The alarm won’t stop.
You rise. Trudge into the bathroom.
Do what you must to face the day.
Into your vehicle, out of the drive,
hit the Interstate, where you become as one
with your bumper-to-bumper lifestyle.
She still playing in your thoughts,
but dimly now, almost gone.
Until tonight

~~ How come abbreviated is such a long word? ~~

ice
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since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

1 posted 2011-09-05 08:47 AM

A wonderful, and terrible dream, at the same time..a shame we cannot just stay in our dreams sometimes...but there is always tonight, and the possiblility of reoccurence(word?)
Even though it is dark in ways, I like the story in the poem.

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

2 posted 2011-09-05 08:47 AM

steamy dreamy there Jerry. Great write. I wonder if thats where some of the road rage comes from....frustrated dreamers...?
Lori

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

3 posted 2011-09-05 09:23 AM

Hello Ice, and yes it is a dark poem, as are many of my poems. When we dream I feel many of them are our subconsciousness having a little one-on-one with us.

Lori, I never thought about the road rage part of it, I might add another few lines in the future. You have a wicked mind, dere, my friend.

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Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10

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Fair to middlin' of nowhere

4 posted 2011-09-05 01:17 PM

From you Jerry I'll take that as a compliment.

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

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South Louisiana

5 posted 2011-09-05 01:32 PM

I meant it as a compliment, Lori.

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2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

6 posted 2011-09-05 02:21 PM

hello,jerry, this is excellent and I love the move from dreams to reality your poem suggests artfully, this is a real accomplishment to read such a write,

thanks a lot

yann

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

7 posted 2011-09-05 03:24 PM

Thank you yann. I redid it a few times because transferring the reader's mind from dream to reality, as you said, can get icky.

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suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

8 posted 2011-09-05 05:17 PM

If only the love, forgiveness and acceptance we find in dreams of reuniting could last after waking!

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

9 posted 2011-09-05 05:30 PM

Ain' dat da truf . . .

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ebonygirl
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since 2011-07-14

Posts 2000
California U.S.A

10 posted 2011-09-05 06:54 PM

Dear JP2 I enjoyed your poem, are your dreams vivid and in color? I hope they will become a reality for you one day,
Ms. E

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

11 posted 2011-09-05 07:29 PM

They are vivid, Ms. E, and every so often in color. Oh, I have had many dreams come true, but I wouldn't mind one more.

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Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

12 posted 2011-09-06 12:47 PM

Dreams are often what make life worth living. Dream on.
Ida

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

13 posted 2011-09-06 04:54 AM

quote:
She inspired you with soft lips
honeyed breath,
causing you to stand tall,
believing that if she asked
you could flap your arms
and fly.

I love all of this and the above quoted especially. You rendered this dream so vividly, the full immersion into it and the sobering exit from it. Quite a deed.

I adore having such dreams, they lift me up into the dimension of wellbeing and we can still linger in their memory, even if the intensity fades maybe a little.

Much enjoyed.

Love,
M

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

14 posted 2011-09-06 08:11 AM

I love to dream, Ida, and for the most part they are pleasant indeed,

Margherita, thanks for all the nice thoughts and comments about "The Dream."

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