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And I thought |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813
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I thought to write, or I should say that it certainly was my intentions to think it thus, of the woman in me that is now steeled against the hurts inflicted by this world, against weakness, against all that makes her cry. I thought to portray her as being beyond tears, to illustrate her strength with metaphor and simile but she thought of the need to touch the unreachable, and the faltering only magnified that the distance between has been made unbreachable and we both started to cry… *found one of my last from 09 that I never posted...and so I post...with a long deep sigh |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
'09 was a good year for your poetry too. Excellent write. Enjoyed the read. JL  Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I can't imagine someone with so soft a heart ever becoming immune to tears... you spill caring with every drop. *S* It is good to read you again... whatever the date on the penning! *G* |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Loved your poem, so much emotion in '09. Ms. E |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: Shared tears are really a major gift I would say. Most captivating write. Love, Margherita "Love is the One who masters all things; |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
Poignantly written and expressed. |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
"that the distance between has been made unbreachable" Lucky for us that the distance across is not wide..The crack that seperates the realities of happy and sad is very narrow, and we human beings cross back and forth many times during life. You were on the sad side when you wrote this poem...I hope you have breached the cleft by now... Very nice writing, you have explained your feeling well. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Any good woman certainly never has only one thought, dear one... no, a very good woman always sees both sides, and feels very, very deeply. As do you, as is portrayed here. Sending huge hugs...  |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813 |
JL thank you very much suthern thank you lady, you see the real ‘me’ ebonygirl, thank you Margherita, thank you, I have locked my tears inside, refusing to let them fall, this memory seems far far away easy1, thank you ice, yes, I have much to be thankful for, much that makes me smile, I hope to put that on paper soon, thank you Sunshine, thank you, for understanding and for the hugs |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I thought to portray her as being beyond tears, to illustrate her strength with metaphor and simile ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ This says so much, there is beauty and sorrow in your poem....and an underlying will to perservere. Very much enjoyed pondering your thoughts. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Luminous One ~ It's very nice to see you posting again. So many emotions can come rising up within us when we revisit a poem from the past. The experiences are still a part of us but hopefully the less pleasant ones don't hurt us as much as time goes by. Love & Luminous Light, EA |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
beautifully penned! Love is the life of the soul... |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Find your poetry unique and a joy to read, Luminosity. Ida |
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