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partly sage, rosemarie abernathy and time |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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you posed mostly nude within your eye skins and then covered everything but those glances like a girl with new ribbons without wrinkles wanting to use them for something very special I teased you about your caution tape boundry and how you stood on your toes to be obvious like the attention was all you wanted really without fingerprints that might linger there you said nu-uh and scurried up a pretending tree leaving your nonchalant to dangle down like a rope maybe wondering if I would tug you to the ground or climb upward using it to move much closer or perhaps your skin covered something more fragile ______________ daark |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"like the attention was all you wanted really without fingerprints that might linger there" sometimes that is all one needs to feel "alive" and yet sometimes, that could be just the beginnings~~ love your titles, D M |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
thanks ms MMs.. |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
I have come to appreciate your poetry, DS. You have a knack (I lost my knack and am searching for it) for subterfuge within the lines, which is delightful. ~ Clones are people two ~ |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Poignant perspectives, awesome angles, masterful. ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!" |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
JP...you still got your knack guy, but thanks for the read and comments. _______________ garapan, thanks so much for the reads |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
This is what the hokey-pokey is really all about. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
DS "perhaps your skin covered something more fragile" Perhaps your eyes see deeper than most. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
What don't I like about this? Naughthin....  |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms ali-san, thanks little one ______________ ms martie, thanks little neighbor _______________ ms sun, you smile me babe |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
This is some good writing, |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Dark I gotta tell ya, I just love your writing. It always makes me smile and that has to be a good thing. This is just superb.. "I teased you about your caution tape boundry and how you stood on your toes to be obvious like the attention was all you wanted really without fingerprints that might linger there" Your title, that was Scott MacKenzie wasn't it? Whew, long time ago but I loved that song and how you played off it. Rosemary Sage Parsley and Tyne Let's roll one right now! Eric the writer views a critic like a fire hydrant would view a dog |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Thank you Earl, I appreciate your reads _________________ ET, thanks guy..yep that was/is a good song. |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
 ^o^ you are a genius xoxoxox |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
DS - You know this is an excellent write but I'm going to tell you anyway - Excellent write, DS! Helen |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
babybel1e...thank you delightful daughter.. ______________ ms helen...you bless me ms, thank you so much |
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Angel4aKing Senior Member
since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372USA |
maybe wondering if I would tug you to the ground or climb upward using it to move much closer or perhaps your skin covered something more fragile I wonder if they all think like you...then all women would be blessed....seeing beyond the superficial....take care,  ~~~kingsangel~~~ |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
thanks lady angel.. |
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Word Weaver Member
since 2011-03-06
Posts 437California, USA |
It takes a real gift to compose a line like, "like a girl with new ribbons without wrinkles" and I applaud you poet. Namaste~ |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
WW..thanks and welcome to the bluezoo.. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: Not only are you an outstanding Poet, but an extremely gifted psychologist too. The mixture is explosive. Love, Margherita |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
You are so good it's almost Scarborough Unfair! |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms mar, thank you lady friend for your touch here. ___________ friend deer...thanks for the reads and sing along amigo |
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EmmaRose Senior Member
since 2011-03-02
Posts 1376Midwest |
Allison, says Hokey Pokey, I feel that it's more like Slip and Slide. Enjoyed this as I tried to pull the rabbit from under your hat. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms emma...shhhh that is not a rabbit...thanks ms |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Went diving and found this gem again. Good that we can find past treasures when you are not around! Awesome. Margherita |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Ms Mar, thank you for the glance ms |
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