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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere 
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sleek lady of the shadows hunger makes you bold you hunt the streets hoping to get lucky as the night unfolds LGR(C)7/28/11 |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
That prompts the question was she sleek or bony... so many going hungry just now.  |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Sadly bone on bone, I've started leaving scraps out...they will come in amazingly close. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yes, I've seen a scraggly vixen or two by the channel... |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Yep. Hunger will drive anything or anybody to take desperate chances. Good on you for leaving scraps. ~ Money can't buy happiness, but broke can't buy anything. ~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
I'm sorry for their situation but I am grateful to have the opportunity to get to see them so close and so many. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Wow, Lori, you say so much in 5 short lines. The desperation is felt as well as read here. Good write. |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Hi Lori, I liked your poem. Your poem had two meanings for me, vixen as in woman of the night and foxy vixen. Sorry, my imagination got away from me. ebonygirl |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
EG No need to apologize that was intentional on my part  Lori |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Michael thank you so much...you let me know my poem read well both ways as I had hoped it would. Lori |
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Spiros Zafiris Senior Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 982Canada |
..nice tanka..it's a tanka..notice how Line 3 finishes the first 3 lines and is, also, the first line of the last 3 lines..but you probably know all this..it's the pivot..much enjoyed..spiros p.s.not all tanka use a pivot [This message has been edited by Spiros Zafiris (07-30-2011 05:50 AM).] |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Spiros thank you for pointing that out...I hadn't caught that.  Lori |
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