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Open Poetry #47

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Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2011-07-27 02:05 PM

She turned and walked away
His eyes followed her retreat once more
What did he say? This time.
She’d done this many times before
He didn’t know what to say or do
His thoughts broken
Hopes dashed
And emotions have left the building.

Gloom

ebonygirl
Member Elite

since 2011-07-14

Posts 2000
California U.S.A

1 posted 2011-07-27 02:50 PM

I like your poem lots of trueth in it.
ebonygirl

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

2 posted 2011-07-28 03:14 AM

I think I can read between lines here, Professor and I hope things improve for you.
Ida

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

3 posted 2011-07-28 10:55 AM

Aboslutely love your last line! Great write
Lori

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

4 posted 2011-07-28 11:17 AM

Love the gloom. Descriptive to the nth. I thoroughly enjoyed reading the dark poem.

~ Money can't buy happiness, but broke can't buy anything. ~

Angel4aKing
Senior Member

since 2006-09-27

Posts 1372
USA

5 posted 2011-07-28 03:10 PM

interesting.....I hope she didn't forget to shut the door before she left the draft could be even colder then this poem....

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

6 posted 2011-07-29 12:44 PM

I like this.

A

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