Open Poetry #47 |
Daddy? |
JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Daddy? Yes. Do you love me? Yes, of course. Really? You know I do. I guess. You silly girl, you; you're my Princess. You love me better than you love Mommy? Daddy? Daddy, did you hear me? Yes. Well? Yes. W-e-l-l, do you? Yes, I love you more than I love Mommy. Princess, what's wrong, you look ready to cry? Mommy said you didn't. Didn't what, Sweetheart? Love me. But I do, Honey. I guess. You guess? Uh, huh. You don't believe me? Uh. Princess, I love you.Why can't you understand? Because. Because why? Why did you leave me and Mommy then? Oh, dear. Mommy said you didn't love me. I . . . That's why you left. That's not true though you know that isn't true, Princess. Mommy said . . . It was her I left, Princess, not you. You didn't take me with you though, so you must have left me, Daddy. You're breaking my heart. Mommy cried, and I did too. Please, Princess, you must understand. Yeah, uh huh, I think I do. Oh, thank you for that. You went off with your secretary, Mommy said. We, uh, we loved each other, Princess. Why come, Daddy, when you had Mommy and me? You don't understand, it's a grownup thing. I guess not. I'm so sorry I caused you pain. But Daddy, you never came back again. I know, I know, I-- That's why Mommy ran into that train. Yes, I know, I heard. Just before it crashed into us, Mommy said a nasty and called your name. I looked for you and the secretary at the funeral. Well, un, Honey, we just couldn't come. Even when the coffins were put into the ground, I looked for you. Oh, Daddy, don't look so sad, I'm not really mad, silly. There is one thing I would like to ask, Princess. What, Daddy? How long do I have to wait here? You mean here at the gate? Yes, how long? That's why I've been sent to tell you. Oh? Yes. So, how long? You have to leave now, Daddy. Leave?I just got here. But there was a mix-up, Daddy. How's that? This is Heaven, Daddy, you can't stay, you have to take the elevator down. ~ Money can't buy happiness, but broke can't buy anything. ~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Ouch Jerry...that stirred up some painful emotions (sniff, sniff) I liked the twist at the end. Lori |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thanks Lori, sorry it brought back old hurts. ~ Money can't buy happiness, but broke can't buy anything. ~ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Not at all what I expected by the title, Jerry. It was so much more. Raw...and well done. "The business of the poet...is to show the sorriness underlying the grandest things and the grandeur underlying the sorriest things." Thomas Hardy |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I'm glad you liked the poem, Sunshine. I always appreciate your views. ~ Money can't buy happiness, but broke can't buy anything. ~ |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
From the beginning lines filled with smiles to the powerful punch at the end... fantastic! |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I thank you very much, suthern, for being here. ~ Money can't buy happiness, but broke can't buy anything. ~ |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Wow! JerryPat2 Your poem stirred up lots of emotion. Well done, ebonygirl |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Then I am satisfied, ebonygirl, thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my poem. ~ Money can't buy happiness, but broke can't buy anything. ~ |
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Amberzlynnc Member
since 2010-08-24
Posts 229New Jersey |
Wow! What a powerful piece. Not what I was expecting in the beginning.. brilliant! |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you very much, Amberzlynnc, for your kind words. ~ Money can't buy happiness, but broke can't buy anything. ~ |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
It’s Raw Deal, Jerry. True, life sometimes is all complicated and unfair to innocent people. "The secret behind survival of mankind is kindness and love within our hearts" |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
You got that right, Prasad, Thanks for being here. ~ Money can't buy happiness, but broke can't buy anything. ~ |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Wow... just enough to make hell HELL once you get there. This one makes you think, JP. Good write. Michael |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Hi Michael, good seeing you here. Thanks. ~ Money can't buy happiness, but broke can't buy anything. ~ |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
this one leaves me speechless~~ M |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Even speechless, nakdthoughts, I appreciate you being here. ~ Money can't buy happiness, but broke can't buy anything. ~ |
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