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JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

0 posted 2011-07-11 10:22 PM

Cloistered by her unwritten word,
Made horrendous as a silent bell,
I scrawl lines to her, but has she heard
My prayer wherever she doth dwell?

Tenuous is life, color it red,
For the pain and suffering we bear.
Days march on no matter what's ahead,
Tears of joy or glee, we are its heir.

I, the father, find it harder still,
Experience has not prepared me
To unearth a ghost-like fear that chills,
Add my heart and soul and that makes three.

I honestly sluice my soul for truth,
Not hide from skeletons I expose.
I cringe not at my findings as sleuth,
Aware that I am not your hero.

These months of separation cause pain,
And as I lie among the refuse
Of past sins which I wear like a chain,
That flays and leaves such hideous bruise.

My pen shan't be still, yea, it must write,
Questions have to be posed and then purged.
I'll n'er dream sweet dreams into the night,
Lo, nightmares torture me in their dirge.

~ Employ teenagers while they know everything. ~

Spiros Zafiris
Senior Member

since 2002-10-20

Posts 982
Canada

1 posted 2011-07-12 02:26 AM

..very good one..!

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

2 posted 2011-07-12 03:25 AM

Excellent!

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

3 posted 2011-07-12 06:47 AM

Thanks, Spiros.

~ Employ teenagers while they know everything. ~

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

4 posted 2011-07-12 06:47 AM

Appreciate it, Marchmadness.

~ Employ teenagers while they know everything. ~

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2011-07-12 12:28 PM

"I honestly sluice my soul for truth,
Not hide from skeletons I expose.
I cringe not at my findings as sleuth,
Aware that I am not your hero."

you are a hero

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

6 posted 2011-07-12 12:57 PM

Thank you, passing shadows, for saying what you did. I don't feel like a hero, but I am happy someone else does,

~ Employ teenagers while they know everything. ~

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

7 posted 2011-07-12 03:54 PM

Very impressive, dear Jerry, chilling in its depth of analysis and heart warming in its honesty. May she hear and understand.

Love,
Margherita

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

8 posted 2011-07-12 05:17 PM

Thank you very much, Margherita.

~ Employ teenagers while they know everything. ~

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

9 posted 2011-07-12 08:29 PM

Deep and dark... just the way I like it

Abe
Senior Member

since 2003-05-28

Posts 694
Looks like Vero Beach, FL until the end!

10 posted 2011-07-12 08:37 PM

I don't usually read (even mine) but title caught my attention and I must say, "Wish I could write like that!"
Thanks,
Abe

Del "Abe" Jones
Mankind's greatest accomplishment is not the revolution of technology, it is the evolution of creativity. copyright 1984

More poet

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

11 posted 2011-07-12 09:24 PM

Jerry, you took a very sharp quill today
and drew enough blood by the pricking
of a finger, then let loose so many truths
that one might reel in kind.

In fact, I can still smell the salt of
this on you.

Color yourself humble, it takes a big man
to forgo this much honesty. For I feel it
was an honest write, not something made up,
or supposed, or imagined.

How do I say this? You make me proud by
your honesty.

"The business of the poet...is to show the sorriness underlying the grandest things and the grandeur underlying the sorriest things." Thomas Hardy

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

12 posted 2011-07-12 09:32 PM

I thank you, Michael, I admit to getting dark every so often.

Abe, I am pleasantly surprised by your comment, and I thank you very much. You write "like" that. I read your stuff, just never commented on anything of yours. I assumed you'd rather be solitary.

Sunshine, honestly is the only way I know how to deal with life. I have a lot to reveal, a lot to understand, and a lot of making up to do and I don't know if I have enough time. I've been forgiven for things, it is me that is the lone holdout. I can't bring myself to forgive me. Thank you for you very nice comments.

~ Employ teenagers while they know everything. ~

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