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Love's Requiem
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Love's Requiem |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
He lay in that same bed, in that same darkness that same open window, the same clinks and clangs billowed bellowed... from below to his head to overstuffed pillows. What had transpired in the last 48... hours he lacked the energy to express. too long a wind, too long a press and too much way too much to confess. Exhausted, Exhausted, he thought fighting and fought to keep his eyes open but he must write must write to express Sweetly and tenderly when all that was is... a mess. a gentleness settled over his mind as did the weary warrior digress... "just this day, this simple day only a piece of it can I, will I do I profess..." "18 hours, 18 hours a long day not much transpired, no more... no less" "a rattled email came in but none went out, my part, my heart is set." and in the corner in the shadow he made out the shape of what he once held, dear the reality, now vainly painfully, very clear "with failed resuscitation power I pause, I tried, for months, for hours... to kiss a rose a birthday rose with a gasping grasping breath pricked by thorns, the taste of blood, and death." |
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katahdin Senior Member
since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196ME. In the Shadow of the Mt. |
All I can say is WOW!! Well done! Kat >^..^< |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Brad, this is very sad. However, it is a very fitting way to express it, for many reasons - the ones that come to mind immediately are that you bring closure to something that didn't work; you do it with grace and no recriminations which is good for her and even better for your soul because hate and resentment would hurt you more than her; you open yourself up to new opportunities; you create a safety net for you to return to, to prevent you from going back to a situation with no hope; and in doing all of this, you create a work of art of which others can appreciate the beauty and from which they can glean wisdom. May you heal soon so that you are ready for what I called in some or other poem of mine some time back and relating to myself, "the next onslaught!" Smiles. Owl |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Excellent poetry, form and content. Classic, but with a modern feel.. Romance denied or given is a wonder-filled topic..You have done well with that theme. |
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Raevyn Elle New Member
since 2011-06-27
Posts 2 |
Excellent work! Very well written  |
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