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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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I wanted to write of elephants today under the gray of seashell ears whipped around and tossed in the air by a curious trunk But the sky changed and turned a mellow marshmallow and melted it while I watched my eyes stabbed by the forked sun I thought I'd already caught the glade how its grasses are spiked and blown dry as the waters that were drowning tree legs now hold the wasted treasures of man who fished and missed and left pieces behind Tokens that held the thought of the day with a beer can and plastic fork caught in the briar of fishing line and lures held to the moss and mosquitos of time stirred into a pot of missed opportunity I wanted to walk into a green spring day and blossom a flower and see the wheat grass play in the empty nests of sunshine and feathers blessed be the warm ground and all and I did [This message has been edited by Martie (05-27-2011 08:16 PM).] |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
. . . as long as you did, Martie, everything is right with the world. Your day was certainly different, mine was hectic. How does a guy who lives alone have a hectic day? Don't ask. "held to the moss and mosquitos of time stirred into a pot of missed opportunity" I believe moss and mosquitoes would be a good base for a pot of south Louisiana gumbo. I'm in for it. Gotta love it! ~ I went to a restaurant that serves "breakfast at any time" / I ordered French Toast during the Renaissance ~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Martie, you walked into a spring day with your nature eyes and sunshine heart and warmed and enhanced everyone else’s day in the doing of it. Please write of elephants one day, with your Martie-pen, but free elephants wandering the plains of my beloved Africa. They (and I and everyone else) would bless you for your beautiful words, as we do for all your writings. Owl |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sissie... this was a child's captivated world with all of the mysteries that a child's eyes behold...and then some. And then it was adult in its reality, and mystery in what we cannot contain nor cure... let alone fix it. And then...it was, to borrow from a southerner we know and love...just magick! It's a  , darlin'! |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I always know when I see your name that I'm going to love what you have written and I did, Poetess. Ida |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Jerry....hectic happens in the wind tunnel of the mind, I guess, or from eating too much gumbo. Thanks for stopping by for my California day stew. Hi James...thanks for the read Diana....The elephants were clouds and I took the circus out of them for you. If I warmed your day, I'm happy! Sissie...of course you knew where I was going with this, you went with me. Ida...what a lovely thing to say...thanking you, I do! |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you, Martie, for taking the circus out of the elephants for me. Smiling. I love that they were clouds. Yes, you always warm my day with your poetry, but when it is sad poetry, then it is a different kind of warming - a concerned sad warming because you let us share the sadness. Owl |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
you made me dream martie, and feel vastness of elephants, this is a jewel that I enjoyed a lot, very graceful and inspiring regards yann |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: Glorious, dear Martie. You walked into Spring and the screen of your poetic mind shared the beauty masterfully. Love, Margherita |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Nothing beats "wanting" becoming "reality" my friend....very nicely written. I wanted right along side you... j. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
such beauty I have been missing, Hi Lady M. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Yann...thanks for the lovely reply. Margherita...I always look forward to your replies, almost as much as your poetry. Your words are always so heart centered and beautiful. Hi Jimmy...I hope that you not only wanted, but did. It's good to see you! Hi Very Barry...It's wonderful to see you. I wish you the best and hope that all is well in your life. |
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Brian James Member
since 2005-06-26
Posts 147Winnipeg |
The world is so beautiful. Too bad the world keeps changing. "Tokens that held the thought of the day" is such a testament to the poetic imagination. My favourite line in the poem. Elephants in the clouds - white elephants - goes with the wasted treasures of man. Burdens disguised as gifts. Your eye is keen enough to see the difference and even to read gifts into the burdens. It's always an honour to read your poetry, Martie. Hope you are having a lovely springtime. I know you are capable of enjoying it more than most people. Brian "To me, the thing that art does for life is to clean it, to strip it to form." |
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