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JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

0 posted 2011-05-09 09:00 AM

I've walked grand halls
fat-cat rich on parade
splenderscrumptious
never felt I belonged there
though it was nice to tarry
until I decided to go

I've lain flat on my back
in the vast grassland of this land
staring up into the heavens
makes a fellow feel small
I gave all to that grassland
until I decided to go

I've trod o'er the stench of Hell
adding my own stench as I went
knee-deep in the sins of man
screaming amen to myself
I coveted my place there
until I decided to go

the avenue of graveyards
have been my paradise get-away
elaborate tombstones
cheaper stakes in the ground
I spoke aloud, waited for an answer
until I decided to go

I've fought wars of my own making
with grit and determination
dodging missiles flung toward me
catching them eating with relish
I stepped on many a booby trap
until I decided to go

my struggle fraught with distain
I feel I have dug a deep pit
decided to fill it up
before digging it up again
I labored, oh so hard
until I decided to go

I stalked my own shadow
it was wounded and half dead
it merely stood there
giving up without a fight
I had congress with my shadow
until I decided to go

the sinister spirits of slaughter
the dark angels of death
have depicted me admirable
one they may swoop down and
insert themselves into my battle
until I decided to go

I'm like a stalwart enemy
although the enemy is me
oh, how I've maimed and destroyed
it's true about burning bridges
you can never cross over again
until I decided to go

~ I have never been in a situation where having money made it worse. ~

[This message has been edited by JerryPat2 (05-09-2011 10:19 AM).]

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2011-05-09 09:27 AM

Impressive, dear Jerry. Love your title too ... "Wandering to wonder"! Perfect, you are on your way. As long as we are able to "wonder" we have not lost one of the main ingredients of a meaningful life. Those who have never really overcome any challenges, those who have not seen the darkness, those who have not lived close to despair and "felt small" while looking up into the sky, they have still more to wander and to wonder ...
Your Path straightens more with every step you take.

Excellent.
Love,
Margherita

EmmaRose
Senior Member

since 2011-03-02

Posts 1376
Midwest

2 posted 2011-05-09 10:35 AM

I admire your honest take on your own self, not shirking at all from the truth of you.
I liked this a lot. It takes a lot to expose

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

3 posted 2011-05-09 10:43 AM

I call it therapy, Emma, and I need a lot of therapy I'm afraid. I'm working on it.

Thank you for reading and commenting.

~ I have never been in a situation where having money made it worse. ~

dreamgal
Member

since 2011-03-17

Posts 442

4 posted 2011-05-09 12:11 PM

Jerry,

What an incredibly honest, vulnerable, expression of parts of your life. It was beautifully written. I really enjoyed this one.

Dreamgal

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

5 posted 2011-05-09 12:19 PM

Mucho thanks, Dreamgal, your words carry a lot of weight around here.

~ I have never been in a situation where having money made it worse. ~

Paul Wilson

Member Elite

since 2002-07-07

Posts 4711
United States

6 posted 2011-05-09 12:59 PM

Jerry...Really liked this piece. It made me do alot of thinking. Thanks for sharing...Paul

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

7 posted 2011-05-09 01:32 PM

Appreciate your comments, Paul, and thank you for stopping by.

~ I have never been in a situation where having money made it worse. ~

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

8 posted 2011-05-09 02:24 PM

Please accept my profound words of regret and sorrow, Margherita , that I failed to look above Emma's name and I left you out of the thank you comments.

Please believe me, although I guess I wouldn't blame you if you didn't, but it was just a simple oversight.

I am sorry. I didn't forget you on purpose. It was an accident and I just don't know what else to say, but I'm sorry again.

Thank you very much for stopping by my page to read and comment so positively on my words, they are very much appreciated.

~ I have never been in a situation where having money made it worse. ~

faithmairee
Senior Member

since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

9 posted 2011-05-09 03:02 PM

very well wrtitten and says so much...i love your poem's depth, JerryPat

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

10 posted 2011-05-09 03:04 PM

Thank you, Faith, been awhile since you've been around the blue place. Hope everything is okay.

~ I think we should only read books that wound and stab us.-Kafka ~

faithmairee
Senior Member

since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

11 posted 2011-05-09 05:50 PM

thanks...yes. everything's ok...just working a lot of weird hours that have me in a twist...

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

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