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Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2011-04-11 08:57 AM

I pretended to be just another hound
humping your leg in anticipation
of you begging for a bone again

but then you were lady like on sundays
and did that thing with your legs
crossing them like closing the gate

and keeping me outside in your yard
chained to the axle of your chevrolet
although you left it mostly in neutral

so I could follow you around the trees
and always have tires to wet on
until you were ready for petting again

and had to admit I was your best friend

______________

daark

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

1 posted 2011-04-11 10:37 AM

This makes me feel sad. I love how you write and I did smile as I read. I don't feel boo-hoo sad, just inside sad.

xoxoxo
Ali-san

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

2 posted 2011-04-11 11:12 AM

ms ali-san...a gods job is never done...even when lexdexic...thanks little one

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

3 posted 2011-04-11 09:08 PM

Yeah, but it still makes me feel kind of sad. You know?

Ali-san

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

4 posted 2011-04-12 03:14 AM

Whoever made you feel like this kept the relationship so to say out of "axle", but the final realization of you "being her best friend" renders her some humanity.

Masterfully rendered psycho play.

Yet, I agree with dear Alison, there is a touch of sadness/bitterness in this.

Love,
Margherita

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

5 posted 2011-04-12 07:52 AM

ms ali-san...no need to be sad...I have the whole junk yard to myself now...

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ms mar..the metaphor here is just typical courting ritual...over embellished a bit I might add. thanks lady friend

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

6 posted 2011-04-12 10:37 AM

Okay, no more sadness ~ now just a touch of envy that you own all the rusted out cars.

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

7 posted 2011-04-12 11:17 AM

ms ali-san..so many jeepwheels and so little time..

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

8 posted 2011-04-13 05:12 PM

I loved your ending to this for sure, but found these lines so intriguing:

"and keeping me outside in your yard
chained to the axle of your chevrolet
although you left it mostly in neutral"

what a mind-picture you've drawn!

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

9 posted 2011-04-13 05:57 PM

thanks steavenr...damn junk yards hook ya every time huh?

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