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Desparate times
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Desparate times |
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Syuri Sky New Member
since 2011-03-28
Posts 3Knoxville, TN |
Through these flushing tears, only one voice can I hear. Will you save me this time? Is it worth the impossible climb? I see Im getting no where. You shattered all this to bits and pieces with just one tare. Can't you see these battle wounds that we share, that I bare? Its true I hurt too! I swear this is the last time that I will ever be here! Can't you tell in my voice that i am real sincere? Don't try to stop me... |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Whitney, welcome to Pip! It's difficult to have clarity in "desperate times" and through the tears, I agree. So, between the secret hope of being saved and the invitation to not be stopped in your intent, things will have to slowly evolve into a serene understanding of what is. Enjoyed your first offering. Love, Margherita |
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dreamgal Member
since 2011-03-17
Posts 442 |
I really enjoyed this. It was very dramatic and really captured my attention. I look forward to reading more from you. Welcome to pip! Dreamgal |
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Syuri Sky New Member
since 2011-03-28
Posts 3Knoxville, TN |
Thank you all for your wonderful compliments! I enjoyed hearing from you. Best wishes to you both! |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
welcome to PiP...interesting write and very lovely name...syuri (does that not mean pretty?) |
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Syuri Sky New Member
since 2011-03-28
Posts 3Knoxville, TN |
Yes it does, and thank you ever so much for the compliment  |
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Britt_Brat Junior Member
since 2008-03-05
Posts 37Knoxville, TN |
very pretty i like and i know where ur coming from Lost & wondering till I'm found |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Hi Syuri Sky, Read your poem, intense, summer is almost over,... just wondering... how things are going now. Smiles, ebonygirl |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Welcome! Dramatic poetry! ~ Man who stands on toilet is high on pot. ~ |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
welcome -Juju |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
"I swear this is the last time that I will ever be here! Can't you tell in my voice that i am real sincere? Don't try to stop me..." Desperate times for sure. Nice write Syuri Sky. JL |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Syuri Sky, Welcome to pip, you are in the right place. Look forward to reading more of your poems. Enjoyed your poem, intense. Ms. E |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Syuri...Welcome to our family of friends. I hope to read many more of your poems during your stay here. Thanks for sharing with us this poem...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Cool write, my friend...right to the point and declarative!! j. |
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Angel4aKing Senior Member
since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372USA |
Interesting , the words almost spoke to me , we all hurt and we all heal eventually it's a process. ~~~kingsangel~~~ |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Welcome to pip Syuri Sky, Enjoyed your poem and I know will enjoy more, ebonygirl |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
welcome to PIP - wonderful first post Love is the life of the soul... |
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