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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana 
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The censoring of poems here leaves a lot to be desiered. They "caught" me trying to sneak in an unworthy word by the name of . . . oops, can't tell you, but it has to do with a form of laughing. Shame, shame on me . . . <><><><> I've put on my coat, grabbed my hat cranked up the flivver, or caught a bus punched that clock working for the man to make the mon weekend come spend every damned dime on some dame who offered it up mines the best she laughed as we fell into bed fell in love because she was right when it is so good how can it all turn out so wrong been down in the dumps chasing myself around the block about killed myself afraid to stop I've climbed mountains inside myself only to fall down the Canyon of Futility thought something was wrong with me (it was) making notes about people I knew their hair, their noses big or little . . . er . . . take yer choice whether they were grumpy pretty or sinfully ugly (I've had some beautifully sinfully uglies let me tell you) thing is didn't know what to do with all those notes threw 'em away had no idea I really had writin' in my blood killed hundred's of interesting (some of 'um) characters back to love found it didn't know what to do with it left it chip w-a-y too big on my shoulder blamed certain people my influences ya might say but never mind all this ramblin' I'm old enough to die been down many roads all I have to show for it are poems, novels, etc. that sometimes seems like I'm whining three children two of 'em of who stumbled through the clutter of lies and truths to find their pa no one can understand how I feel about that I've heard it over and over if I could go back, wouldn't change a thing I would ~ OK, so what's the speed of dark? ~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
If I had it to do over I'd change more than just one thing I can tell you for sure. I enjoy your ramblings Jerry...your less than perfect past is endearing. Lori |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Hah! Yep, you got that right, my past was absolutely less than perfect. In fact, those who would teach other how to live their lives could point to me as someone not to follow. Thanks Lori. ~ OK, so what's the speed of dark? ~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I think there's quite a few things I would change too Jerry. This poem intrigued me all the way through. Life's like hockey stick handling through all the challenges along the way. Many times one gets checked into the boards of passion. Love this and understood these lines very well... "I've climbed mountains inside myself only to fall down the Canyon of Futility" I know there's really no one that can understand the part about the children but I think you're dealing with it the best way you can. I always appreciate the honesty in your writings. Eric |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Eric, thank you, man. About the children, wow, it's like euphoria on speed. You're so damned happy it is almost impossible to speak. Happy isn't the word, but it'll do. At the same time you realize you are looking, or talking to a child (adult now) that you left twisting in the wind, and THAT takes the wind out of your sail big time. One of my daughters, Paula, have discussed, cussed and gone over and through every emotion in the book and I think we developed some that wasn't there before. She hates me. She loves me. She thinks I'm the smartest man in the world. She thinks I'm a sorryass s.o.b. The other daughter. So different. First thing she asked, "Did you try to find us?" Yes, I did, but they had moved, relatives were no use to me. Then she said, she wasn't there to judge. How can that be. But it appears she isn't. I'm sorry, Eric, I got carried away. It happens when I bring my children up. ~ OK, so what's the speed of dark? ~ |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
enjoyed...always a pleasure to read you & to follow you...an even bigger joy  (i.e., when I can) |
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Word Weaver Member
since 2011-03-06
Posts 437California, USA |
This is great Jerry. I agree with you about the censoring but we work with what we're given. It's never too late and I wish you love. Marcia |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I thank you very much, steavenr, for your kind words. Marcia, yep, that's how it goes, working with what we have. I appreciate your comments, and hope life is good to you. ~ OK, so what's the speed of dark? ~ |
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Spiros Zafiris Senior Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 982Canada |
..bravo Jerry..at least you're writing about it..and your honesty and self-awareness and poetic style are refreshing..bravo Jerry.. ..spiros ------------ |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Appreciate your input here, Spiros. ~ If you don't want gays in the military, make the uniforms ugly. ~ |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Jerry, I am moved reading this poem. It's so easy to judge and think you could have done it better, when you aren't in a situation. Hindsight is always easier, too.... I am terrible at helping my grandkids with advice. They scoff, because they think it was different when I was young. Funny, how some things never change. The only way to avoid learning is not to live. I appreciate your thoughts. ~K |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I appreciate your kind words, K. Hindsight is, of course easier to figure things out. Had to laugh at what your grand-kids said. Yep. Things never change, the generation gap will forever be with us. Thank you again for being here, K. ~ If you don't want gays in the military, make the uniforms ugly. ~ |
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