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Magical Snow Canvas (re-write)
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Magical Snow Canvas (re-write) |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! 
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Silver sheen suspended light Shrouded crystal foggy night Frozen air shaped shards of ice Dimmest glow shone to entice Cast upon snow banks of white Cold snapped with its bitter bite Trees, skeletal, huddled tight Branches dreamed of dawning day As they danced with gentle sway Hoping for warmth of sun light When the darkness took to flight Joy reigned true on chilled daylight Dawn created colors bold Strokes of art in pink and gold Lit by morning sun rays bright Alison (this was a re-write of a poem that I posted as "aziza") |
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EmmaRose Senior Member
since 2011-03-02
Posts 1376Midwest |
That's really nice with either title. I can vividly see your crystal visions.  |
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Misty Lilacs Senior Member
since 2005-11-15
Posts 1060White Birch Forest |
Sound like the morning I am experiencing here! Very cold but beautifully bright. This is a great piece of writing my friend. ooxx Marti |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: You rendered the magic perfectly, dear Alison! Wondrous scenery and brrrrrrrrrr ... it's cold I feel it. Great job! Love, Margherita |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
very beautifully written with such vivid imagery...i too could feel the cold...great poem There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
You made the scene come alive in this one Alison. From a cold cold night til the morning light. Loved the images you created in shadows of the cold night. I've been there.....smile... It's just amazing the imaginary images and colors that come off sunlight on frozen ice. Has a calming effect as nature's art entertains. Well done!! Eric |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Oh, this is lovely, Alison (as though anything you write isn't! - so that was a stupid thing to say). I can feel myself hugging myself for warmth as I gaze, speechless, at my iced and silent Alaskan night and God-painted dawning. Owl |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Only you can make freezing cold sound like paradise, Alison. Ida |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
loved the cadence and the vivid imagery, especially the phrase "Frozen air shaped shards of ice"...mighty, mighty good stuff here |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
EmmaRose, Thank you so much. I am glad you can see what I see. Alison - Marti, They say that spring is on the way - somewhere. xoxoxo Alison - Thank you, lovely Margherita. xoxoxo Alison - Eric, I loved that you enjoyed this and could see the picture. Alison - Owl, Thank you for peeking into my world. Love, Alison - Ida, It is paradise - just a bit frozen most of the time. xoxo Alison - Steaven, Thank you so much, my friend. Alison |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
My teeth are chattering! Bitter bite for sure, but the beauty is one of nature's very own art that holds me spell bound in your description. I live where the weather is mild most of the year, so I'm very spoiled. Your wordpaint takes me there, and I hear the weight of winter! ~KL |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Hey, Karen. Thanks for reading and feeling the chill. It's a bit cold here, but is is beautiful too. Alison |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
I'll never know how that whole state doesn't just thaw and flood the world with your ever warm heart up there melting the bumps off the geese... This poem, like you, is forever lovely. Sweetly done dear Ali. Richard |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
So is your poem, beautiful, Alison. I have some family who live in Fairbanks, and they love it there. A few years ago, a thief was stealing one of the snowmobiles and my cousin went out and tackled him in his nothing but his undershorts. He was blue as a Smurf in short order, but persisted and won with the help of his wife and a shotgun. You Alaskans are a hardy bunch, with true grit. It's a treat to see life there through your poetry, Alison. ) |
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Lilee Junior Member
since 2011-04-03
Posts 16U.S.A |
Beautiful poem! It's really vivid, while reading it you can see a perfect scene in your mind. ~*~*~ |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Awww, Richard, thank you. Just don't blame Global Warming on me. Okay? xoxoxox to you, my friend. Ali - Karen, This is a pretty fantastic state - well, at least, I am partial to it. It's beautiful here. xoxoxo Alison - Lilee, Thank you so much for making me one of your first PiP comments. What an honor to bestow upon me! Welcome and thank you. Alison |
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