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gdcod3player Member
since 2009-09-13
Posts 70California |
I laugh at what everyone says The heart i want couldn't be any farther away Your name feels my dreams You are real in a dream that wont come Let my broken heart be everything i have to pay I feel a sense of hope I dont know if you see everything The heart thats open right now Please save me in a moment Please keep pushing me until i have understood Your heart is for someone else right now |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Jared Well done! Getting those broken hearted feelings across are not always easy but you've done it here. The hope line is the future turn a round and I like how you put it in there amidst the trauma. Eric Siamese twins move to England so the other one can learn how to drive! |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Great write and your last line was a surprise. Lori |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
nice work...very powerful ending...i like it! There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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