Open Poetry #47 |
Last Call |
Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Here I grin, soaked in sunrise tequila and when, laugh of lemon last kiss of salt a swallow of flames chaser, of fault. One more shot of fire and ice come on damnit man don‘t think twice make it a triple of melted truth my sins already have slain my youth. Stolen breath in this ocean of air, drowning in this unseen snare hidden hands upon my throat tears of blood upon, the note. The world, is getting light of bone my cents of worth is now alone the day is dark my vision poor like a cave without, a door. Precious moments wasted hope one more mountain slippery slope dying of living, tired of trying no more tears, my heart is drying. Wicked world her soul brunette she’s my lover no regret she took me for a ride miss giving sucked out every dream worth living. I don’t know If I should exhale cup half empty holy grail I would draw another breath but my pennance, wrote my death. My words like water fall like pain twist like lie and pulse like vein falling through the fangs of hollow one last gasp my life, is swallowed. |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
grin...this is about as cool as it gets...normally with a poem of this length my mind starts to wander but not with this one...i was intrigued from the start and was sorry to see your poem end...though end a poem must... love it...it's brilliant There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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katahdin Senior Member
since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196ME. In the Shadow of the Mt. |
Loved it, especially the last set of lines. Kat >^..^< [This message has been edited by katahdin (03-13-2011 12:52 AM).] |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Haha thanks Faith, and this is a pretty short poem for me lol. Thanks for the kindspeak! |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
I appreciate that Kat, your kindness makes my heart prrrrrr... |
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EmmaRose Senior Member
since 2011-03-02
Posts 1376Midwest |
Amid the turmoil and tumultuous, there is serenity here. Make mine a double, I'd like to drown in the glory of Life. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
It's such a shame that Miss Giving ended up being your misgiving by sucking your dreams dry. Have another tequila! It's on me! Ole! Linda |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Richard - I've no doubt the write emanated from just a moment and we all know that moments pass quickly and that you'll soon be back to the lovely romantic poetry that is you. It is you. This write isn't and I know you know it. But, okay, it was a good and captivating write nevertheless. Helen |
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