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Water Under the Bridge |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere 
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Water under the bridge doesn't flow very far when a beaver's damn holds it in place The first felled tree broke the tranquil churning water round it Snagging passing debris of thought into structure Creating a growing painful pool of past LGR(c)3/9/11 |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hi Lori, subtle and excellent images, works so well as a metaphor...Thanks for the beautiful sharing. yann |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Yann, thank you so much for your generous compliments. Lori |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Whoa! Stagnant pool to drown your sorrows in. Leave it to those pesky beavers to make something bad . . . worse. Like the idea of the falling tree snagging "debris of thought." Such a powerful turn of words. ~ After twelve years of therapy my psychiatrist said something that brought tears to my eyes. He said, "No hablo ingles." ~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Thanks Jerry for your comments, as always good to see you here. Lori |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
This is excellent...you packed so much in so few words...very nicely done, Lori! There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Great imagery in this, dear Lori. The "pool" is ok, but we must make it less painful, by allowing a process of "evaporation"  Love, Margherita |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Faith-Thanks for the complement. It is ironic that when I talk I use alot of words and say nothing LOL ____________________________________________ Margherita-evaporation eh? Now there's an idea, thanks! Lori |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Concise, tight. Good.  |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
"a growing painful pool of past" ...hmmmm....now there's a thought worth thinking about...excellent write |
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katahdin Senior Member
since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196ME. In the Shadow of the Mt. |
Nicely done and thought provoking! I can't pick a favorite line because all of it is my favorite! Enjoyed! Kat >^..^< |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Sushine thanks for the complement! (my jeans are a little concise too I've noticed) ____________________________________________ Steaven- glad to give you food for thought, glad you liked! ____________________________________________ Kat-wow thanks for all the compliments! Much appreciated! Lori |
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