Open Poetry #47 |
Juncture |
Word Weaver Member
since 2011-03-06
Posts 437California, USA |
Late at night, alone She walks the quiet avenue Erect and proud with an air about her That seems to say she’s proud of who she is Stopping at an appealing spot She orders a drink and listens Through the open door To the mournful sounds of a saxophone In a club across the street Finishing his gig for the night He carefully cleans and puts away The treasured instrument that is his life... The pure essence of the man. Then joins the others for one tall frosty one Leaves the club turning at the corner And with his saxophone held close Heads down the late night street To his one-room flat and more stiffling solitude She also leaves heading back Down the quiet avenue toward her hotel They meet at the corner exchange smiles She feels her heart skip a beat Then thinks about her flight in the morning He thinks about her and then About tomorrow's promising audition Both stop to gaze in shop windows Obligations over temptation battle within as They continue on their separate ways And the quiet night shudders as Destiny screams at their rejection |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
"And the quiet night shudders as Destiny screams at their rejection" Way too cool! Loved it! Lori |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Word Weaver, you are well-named. This poem is very beautifully, delicately and cleverly constructed with information subtly supplied and the rest begging conjecture. Mystery, narrative, beauty, drama and tragedy in an impressionistic tapestry. I will certainly be looking out for more of your poetry. Welcome to Pip. Owl |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
I agree with Lori...this is definitely in the 'too cool' category...that ending is exquisite. If I haven't said welcome yet, then let me say it now. You do have an excellent way with words...will be looking for more...nice write |
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