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martiniat8
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since 2003-06-21

Posts 897
Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic

0 posted 2011-03-07 02:35 AM

Last night I couldn't sleep
and I couldn't tell you why
perhaps it was that awkward kiss good-bye

how our lips met
I went back for more
and caught your cheek

the promise of something more
to come

standing on that Black Bridge
that separates you and me

it is said it is a place of horrible things
I don't know the story
but perhaps it will come to me

the bridge between country and city
in a place that looks
not so different from my home

perhaps it was one sleepless night
pondering all the years
and all the tears
the fears

travelling 10,000 miles
for someone to find...
me

and I wondered why in these many months
why I was kept here in this place
this city, this country
held on by possibilities

other loves, other friends
that came and went

and how it seemed I was held here
for you

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

1 posted 2011-03-07 10:11 AM

I like this one too...the story unfolds like a flower.
Lori

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2011-03-11 04:55 PM

This brought the story of Brigadoon back to me, and I appreciate that kind of writing a lot.

Thanks!

martiniat8
Senior Member

since 2003-06-21

Posts 897
Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic

3 posted 2011-03-11 07:55 PM

Wow, Sunshine, great comparison. I'm honored. I will have to watch that movie

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

4 posted 2011-03-12 09:24 AM

Hello martiniat, this is a fine penning with an interesting questionning?i share a lot about your words and the poem touched me artfully.

yann

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

5 posted 2011-03-12 10:41 PM

Nice...James

katahdin
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since 2010-07-01

Posts 1196
ME. In the Shadow of the Mt.

6 posted 2011-03-12 11:19 PM

enjoyed!
Kat >^..^<

easy1
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since 2010-05-22

Posts 1209
Southeastern USA

7 posted 2011-03-18 02:29 PM

A good read, this work of yours. All I'd counsel is that a bridge has two ends... well, usually they do.

As for the attempted kiss, "Missed it by that much!" Better fortune to the learned poet next time, or, I guess, better timing.

martiniat8
Senior Member

since 2003-06-21

Posts 897
Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic

8 posted 2011-03-19 04:22 AM

all things take time... but yes since then there have been more and better kisses :-) this poem may need a re-edit, but it captures a moment the way it is

dreamgal
Member

since 2011-03-17

Posts 442

9 posted 2011-03-22 10:03 PM

It did fold out like a story, I enjoyed it very much.

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