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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Standing with a clench of stones, (not rocks, but bits of graveling) Testing weight's comparison against the emptiness of hand-- the left one much more useless than the day it found a home in yours. How did it come down to this? I asked the glass between us now. Hope glowed dim behind the shade. I told myself that love was brave-- chances, sacrifices made... A single pebble sang true aim and pinged my plaintive plea oh please I thought I heard her giggling (not-at-me-no-not-at-me?) The light went out and silence hissed. I dropped the stones and blew a kiss. "I love you," spoke my dirtied lips. I knew that it would end like this "I'll catch the 6 a.m." |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Your poetry sings a song so familiar and so sad at times. But it sings nevertheless and makes me feel like dancing. Love what you do with the written word, serenity~ |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I love what you do with those words also, my friend. Blues has come upon a perfect description of your poetry, it makes you want to dance. Your off-the-wall word and phrase choices throw the readers for a somersaulting loop at times, and that, to me, brings out the polka with all its pazz-zazz. But beneath the gaudy is the true blues of your heart. It is that I love best of all. ~ I think part of a best friend's job should be to immediately clear your computer history if you die ~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You guys are just so lobely. <--a typo I thought I'd keep in celebration of my clogged sinuses.  I think I'll look for a good movie to watch--it's one of those days when I'm scared to close my eyes. "I'll catch the 6 a.m." Um, it's not like I'm superstitious or anything...but wouldn't that be just like me.  g'nite lovies. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Karen, I am sorry to hear of your sadness and your sinuses, but thank you for weaving your sadness into unique, masterful Karen-threads and creating yet another tapestry of eloquence and beauty. Owl |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
good grief girl you made me laugh a few moments ago so hard I near peed my pants and now a sadness that just cuts my bones whew love you  |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
a very unique and expertly penned poem...great job as always! There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Some days I feel the need to "wallow"--a word I hate, btw--it's got an accusotory undercurrent of judgement. So let's just say, for the sake of getting on with things, that I felt the pain, acknowledged it, and I'll move on.  Thanks for holding my hand through a fever. I love you all.  |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
makes me sad to hear you are blue. love to you,jo |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
ah--I just got the Mardi Gras flu before it was over.  It's rather annoying though, since the hubs is all well-and-friggin'-fine and he goes to each parade, like, three times. He at least attempts to put his hand on every plastic bauble from here to Taiwan, and is he sick? (I am resisting the urge to go cough on his pillows.) I really am.  |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
I've read this multiple times today and still I am no closer to 'getting it' so, I am going to try it again tomorrow with a fresh mind...I have a need to understand The good part is...I get to read it again, and again, and again... |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
I'm kinda like Steaven in that I'm not always sure I'm tracking your poem but I love it anyway...I like polka music but I don't know how to dance to it either. It is just good stuff. Lori |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You just snuggle into the blankies...I'll bring the tea... we'll count the leaves after we've munched on the dark chocolate [for our nerves, y'know...] |
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