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After All These Years
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After All These Years |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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I was refinishing the deck you loved to bask on, It was cedar and smelled clean, durable odor of nature's pleasures. Caught a glimpse of you walking past the patio doors. There they were, those same shapely legs with a stride particular to dedication's familiarity. A determined walk but with pearls of distinction you still carry yourself through a prism of class. Angles of beautiful light only I can see. I immediately wrote a love song in my mind Hoping that when I try to express it you will hear what I really have to say. Sometimes after all these years I struggle to speak, yet do actually feel, what I want to say But when we're face to face I'm lost in a sea of common words Words that will never do you justice or cause you to remember them. I get your smile and I know it's a plentitude of the love you've always had for me. Yet later, when we get together, and those same legs surround me with needs I'd like to generate my heart to cry right through your soul. To tell you the intimacy of these times mean more than a climax of physicality Because there could never be another you to accept me for the stumbling words that hide my wisdom of loving you after all these years. true love never looks after it's own interests |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
Eric-Very beautifully expressed! Great poem! There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Not even in the throes of passion can I imagine you stumbling over words my friend...breathless maybe, with a momentary inability to speak, but never stumbling. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
One of the reasons I resonate within your poetry is because of the specific lines that always belong to you, quote: This is one of those times, my friend, that I wish I had written this, just so I could lend it out to others. I love this line! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
wouldn't every woman love to receive these words~~ M |
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Spiros Zafiris Senior Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 982Canada |
..such heartfelt truth and love expressed here; much enjoyed..>>spiros |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Eric, it is delightfully heart-warming and reassuring to see the proof in your constant affirmation of the fact that there really are some men who really do love and honour their wives “after all these years” and profess it to other people. It is like a breath of cool forest air permeated with the sweet scent of flowers and accompanied by the trills of birdsong and powder blue skies with happy fluffy little clouds peeping through the forest canopy on a typical South African summer day. You renew my faith in human nature. Oh, and I love the poem too!!! Owl |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Eric...A something special feeling that I'm sure she knows, wheather you think you say it right or not. This poem is proof. |
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Rainbowdust Member
since 2002-12-05
Posts 320Sydney, Australia |
Wow. It sure sounds like you both have been blessed with the kind of love I hope blesses my life one day... absolutely loved this beautiful expression of your feelings... sometimes words only seem to skim the surface, but your poem is not one of those times. "I'd like to generate my heart to cry right through your soul." Loved this line! Thank you for sharing. The soul would have no rainbows, had the eyes no tears. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
stumbling? yes I do when I read you but that's a good thing my friend I love getting caught up |
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EmmaRose Senior Member
since 2011-03-02
Posts 1376Midwest |
But when we're face to face I'm lost in a sea of common words Words that will never do you justice ************************************** With such aplomb, you express that which is universal. That feeling of awe when in the company of true love, which bears great poetry when alone and in a reflective mood. |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
It was somewhere amidst this line: "But when we're face to face I'm lost in a sea of common words" where a tear leaped onto my cheek... Eric my dear friend, I don't think thats ever happened to me from the words of a man's pen, 'cept maybe Neruda on a merciless night in the mist. It was an honor to read, feel, and learn from you this evening. You are an inspiration, and a hero, for all men seeking serenity. Richard |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Faith I appreciate those kind words. Eric __________________________ Paula That's a nice comment. Having just the right words is something we all seek I guess. I appreciate your visit very much. Eric ______________________________ Dear Karilea I'm certainly happy anytime I can make any sort of impression on such a fine poet as yourself. Thanks for the mention of that line and for being there as a wonderful poet friend. Eric _____________________________________ Maureen I'm sure many women do. However, I thank you for that comment and for the many times you have visited over the years. I also have always appreciated your comments and poetry. Eric ______________________________________ Spiros I thank you and have to say I wrote it as honestly as I could feel it. Eric ______________________________________ Will get back to everyone else soon. Eric true love never looks after it's own interests |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Love is all that and so much more. You wrote this beautifully, ethome~ |
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