Open Poetry #45 |
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Odds and Ends at Sipapu Creek |
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jbstillwater Member
since 2009-07-03
Posts 216Albuquerque, New Mexico ![]() |
The sweet gentle sound of a rhyming wind whispers down Sipapu Creek. A whirlwind snow and spitting rain, spinning trees to glass . White-faced rocks pocked with dirt, eyes errantly peeking toward Beaver Ridge Dam . Splintered memories of when the creek did flow. . Trickles of water. A trail for climbing; ruts perfect for soft, summer feet. Now frozen in early day cold. I search for what was lost, caught in the bramble My heart, in pieces, strewn. Odds and ends. As we jumped into the mossy deep to cool in Sipapu Creek. . Our rock, special, now cracked with cold, snow covered in pine- sap ice. We kissed. As the gentle sighs of a rhyming wind carried us beyond the creek and into the wild of our own desire. Another time and season, when the creek did flow and the sweet rhyming wind sighed down a roaring creak, merging its destiny with ours. Leaving naught but odds and ends in the early day cold. Inhaling that time when the creek did flow and life was warm at Sipapu . |
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Bloodline Member
since 2009-05-23
Posts 236Oklahoma |
Jan, a sweet time in hearts and memories that can warm our soul, life we hold in our core for moments of remembrance, the spirit that keeps us human, Bloodline |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I literally sighed when I came to the following lines ~ "snow covered in pine- sap ice. We kissed." Brought some fond memories of my own. This is a lovely write and I enjoyed it very much. You are a fine poetess! ![]() EA |
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OldPoet Member
since 2009-06-30
Posts 112The Left Coast |
Like EA, I sighed. But not for remembrance. For envy. "And every time I've held a rose |
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Johan Member
since 2009-05-13
Posts 88Lincolnshire, England U.K. |
I recall your photo Jan when you climbing that trail, this poem really makes one understand you are at one with nature. Johan |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
a saturday evening post toast with afternoon scattered all around like happy soot from a friendly chimney.. enjoyed your splay of sigh here ms |
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jbstillwater Member
since 2009-07-03
Posts 216Albuquerque, New Mexico |
Thanks poets Yes, A...it is a place I love to go and you have seen that photo. Thanks all for stopping by to read Jan |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
The rhyming wind evokes such a wistful mood and truly moved me. Beautiful poetry in motion. A belated, warm welcome to you, jbstillwater~ |
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D.Lester Young Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1219Austin, Tx |
Your intertwining Uni-Verse is about dancing words flowing on a canvas of love, and spreading their wings going further. |
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jbstillwater Member
since 2009-07-03
Posts 216Albuquerque, New Mexico |
Thanks guys: Happy that you liked it! Jan |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: Wonderful nostalgic write, dear Jan! Outstanding imagery. Love, Margherita |
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jbstillwater Member
since 2009-07-03
Posts 216Albuquerque, New Mexico |
Thanks Margh for stopping by for a read Jan |
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