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Sonofgloin Junior Member
since 2009-06-09
Posts 48Australia |
My senses awake, I'm amongst the crowd but sleep still beckons my head The rush cometh, and I am swept along and the journey begins to begin Faces of white, pink, and brown, faces masking their souls Lives lived fully, and some sqandered away but how are we to know We look one to another, day in day out with the weekend our only respite When Monday harkens, we do respond and the rails again take flight She always sit's there, he stands by the door the charactors know their place Some are in meander for a single event but most plod the tracks for haste A place to be, a time to be kept the journey a means to an end Talk is stilted, though travellers abound with faces as fimiliar as friends He had more hair when I first rode the rail and her face held the blush of youth But here we meet, two times a day and to me their lives are mute. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
What a great slice of life!! Love how you interwove the simplicity and complexity. Good reading, and welcome to Passions, Sonofgloin~ |
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Sonofgloin Junior Member
since 2009-06-09
Posts 48Australia |
Thanks for that, I feel I am a little out of my depth here but "pragmatic" poetry seems to be my form of expression. |
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freeze us both in time@ Junior Member
since 2009-06-14
Posts 16 |
This is extremely brilliant and inspiring. I myself am young and wish i could write as deep as you. It would be more of a pleasure if other people came up with stuff like this...i guess some people just dont have it. I am a new poet and have viewed various posts you are definately a favourite. Thank you sonofgloin |
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Sonofgloin Junior Member
since 2009-06-09
Posts 48Australia |
Freeze, many thanks, poetry is the supreme form of "different strokes for different folks", but for myself if I have to fight through descriptives to find the theme, I give up. So I write pragmatic poetry, hopefully not too obscure. Glad to find someone who observes more than the eye see's, but that is a tenet of being a poet so attributable to all I surmise on this forum....thanks...Paul. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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