Atahsaia, Catching Fireflies

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Open Poetry #45

Atahsaia, Catching Fireflies

jbstillwater
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since 2009-07-03

Posts 216
Albuquerque, New Mexico

0 posted 2009-07-15 02:33 PM

He fades on his moonlit walk, a shrinking violet
through fields of fire flies this last night of summer
before they leave; before they die.
His footsteps soft through cutter grass
sharp against ghost legs, jar in hand.,
disappearing-reappearing
Black curls cropped above sage bush, he reaches
to catch the flash moving in and out of his life,
capturing it in his lightning bug jail
A whoop and a holler as he heads through the meadow,
shoulder deep in Luna’s light; he blinks away the moment
lest she memorize his soul
Howling a mournful song, he takes her lightness
to the Rio in water deep and dark, for a swift ride
to nowhere, for he hides deep in his meadow
as he fades on his moonlit walk, a shrinking violet
through fields of lightning bugs and cutter grass
on this last night of summer
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(Author's note) Atahsaia is the Zuni Demon of the night who has been known to hide behind rocks and sage brush during the day . There is also a deep metaphor in this poem.)

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

1 posted 2009-07-15 03:06 PM

ms jb..sequins on a gypsy dancer's black as the night skirt come to mind here, brings back memories of mandan lake up in north wi/minn...enjoyed the view..a bit more romantic then the actual story I suspect..

miscellanea
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since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

2 posted 2009-07-15 03:51 PM

jbstillwater

a captivating read! I've read it three times, but it begs to be read more.

miscellanea

Heart2Heart
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since 2009-05-15

Posts 738
Scotland/Norway

3 posted 2009-07-15 03:55 PM

I can only comment on the exquisite wording of this poem. A fine write indeed.
Katriona

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

4 posted 2009-07-15 05:05 PM

quote:
A whoop and a holler as he heads through the meadow,
shoulder deep in Luna’s light; he blinks away the moment
lest she memorize his soul

I was somehow magnetized by this spectral write, you rendered the atmosphere masterfully.

Haunting!

Love,
Margherita

jbstillwater
Member

since 2009-07-03

Posts 216
Albuquerque, New Mexico

5 posted 2009-07-16 04:46 PM

Thanks guys

Happy that you stopped by for a read

Jan

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