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garbled garden |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere 
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the clever clover clinging cover mocked my tears mixed with buttercups the thinking thistle listened, whistled, warning me to head back home the lilac liars all accused me accordingly of crescent crimes the pious peonies blushing bashfully lifted their leaves to their throats the deviant daffodils called casually dangerously ‘chivalry is dead’ black~eyed~susans smiled secretly with their one~eyed worried winking while the tulips kissed my two lips in good~bye lover lore and my waking windflower wary, weary wept for you… . don't wait for the storms to end~ learn how to dance in the rain... [This message has been edited by brneyedgrly (07-15-2009 11:35 PM).] |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Oh Shellie, I love this! Each flower realy does have its own joie de vivre, its peculiar personality. Great playful imagery! "lilac liars" and "pious peonies" |
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Heart2Heart Senior Member
since 2009-05-15
Posts 738Scotland/Norway |
This is absolutely gorgeous, a beautiful tongue twister written in the most appreciative way. Dawn is for sure the hour of poetry ! Huggs 2 U Heart2Heart |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo dear Shellie, I got a kick out of this. It's very clever. Love Bobby |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
Your garden was delightfully fresh and fragrant |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
Yes, Shellie...this is awesome. I am a sucker for alliteration too. lol Is this a new one? Anything that has deviant daffodils in it has me hooked. |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
. Very good John . |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Great poem. Chivalry is alive and well. I have proof. P Thirty bits of glass had become my teeth, |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"black~eyed~susans smiled secretly with their one~eyed worried winking" cute!!  and yep, alliterations are cool...  |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
would be fun to listen to this as it slipped off of your lip gloss |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: Shellie dear, you are a true connaisseur of the flower girls' language, I see! Awesome is right! Love, Margherita  |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
wow...thanks everyone! kacy~ thank you...i think your beautiful flower matrix inspired me a bit heart~lady~ thank you for your always kind words for me yo, bobby~ always glad to please you i~g~ thank you pretty lady jer~ thank you / yes / that doesn't surprise me john~ thank you man of few words for the two you gave me...they say alot p~ thanks...you ARE proof sea~ thanks...i like that verse, too ds~ it would wouldn't it? 'rita~ if you think so, it must be true (((hugs))) love ya...shellie don't wait for the storms to end~ |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Shellie~ the lilac liars all accused me accordingly of crescent crimes the pious peonies blushing bashfully lifted their leaves to their throats the deviant daffodils called casually dangerously ‘chivalry is dead’ Seems like you and I have so much in common, on how we understand and feel about life! When I read your poetry their is such an understanding there, as if I am reading myself... I feel you girl! ~ARH  |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I never met a flower I didn't like! They each have their own individual personality, do they not?  This was a delightful read, SS!  Linda |
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GBride Senior Member
since 2009-07-02
Posts 538 |
The dirty dandelions told me many lies about their secret exploits as violent Russian spies Don't you think dandelions should be included. They love us so much that they come to greet us without our even asking them to. Love your poem! You are quite talented! |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Enjoyed, very clever.latearival |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
~sol sista thanks for enjoying my garden ~gbride welcome and thanks! ~late thanks so much for your comment love, shel don't wait for the storms to end~ |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
This is adorable, Shellie. Ida |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
miss ida... ~thank you sweetie  love ya, shellie |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
How about if I just say that I enjoyed this so much - the title says it all and is perfect. I love the flowers and expansion of their personalities. Guess I already said more than I meant to. xoxoxo Love Alison |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
~you can talk all ya want here thanks, ali~girl shel |
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