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1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2009-07-09 10:00 AM

Up Close Miles Away

don’t be concerned
I don’t want anything
and it’s not so much
that I have missed out
lately I just miss myself
you are just a shadow
in the stirring gray silence
a tickling tip of tongue
spur of the moment
a word unspoken
desperate fading dream
your walls are safe with me
not trying to break any down
not even knocking on your door
just looking in the windows
I could have said more
peeled back the darkness
another road not taken
walking by the could have been
but it still makes me want
to know more about you, just
to look behind the curtains
past the thin glass walls
that I can barely see into
to where you are hidden
scared of up close miles away

"I'm so hard to handle
I'm selfish and I'm sad."
— Joni Mitchell

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

1 posted 2009-07-09 11:10 AM

A very fine piece of introspective writing.

Linda

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

2 posted 2009-07-09 12:02 PM

Enjoyed this Helen! ~ Wonderful

ARCTIC WIND

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

3 posted 2009-07-09 12:08 PM

ms slick..sure makes me want to leave the drapes open..oh, I forgot, I burned them years ago..enjoyed you here

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

4 posted 2009-07-10 06:48 PM

helen - beautiful...

BC

Oklahoma Rose
Senior Member

since 2008-02-28

Posts 1586
Oklahoma USA

5 posted 2009-07-10 10:39 PM

Very beautiful, Helen!

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

6 posted 2009-07-13 11:39 AM

After a while, I become a bit complacent in my absence... and then I peek in and read something like this... and know I have to make poetry a priority again... SOON! *S*

... if only to be jealous of your pen... *G*

miscellanea
Member Elite

since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

7 posted 2009-07-13 01:07 PM

I really admire your ability to write your heart out with such apparent ease. Wow!!

misce'

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

8 posted 2009-07-13 09:33 PM

...and me - always loved the words you paint,
the soul that concieved them, and the heart that gave them life . . . ever since the first time I saw you standing in a black dress, shin deep in the surf...a water nymph almost hidden in the night...

and still...I love them all - the sea, the nymph, the long back dress,the soul and heart that made/make the words dance across the page, and the words, especially the words from the one who gave them light and sustanance in which the rest of us bask - you, my friend, called 1Slick, a very proper term. . . of endearment.

me...

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

9 posted 2009-07-13 09:48 PM

Yo dear Helen,

This poem works very well. It's almost frightening. I like it.

Love Bobby

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

10 posted 2009-07-15 06:13 PM

Fine writing...James

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

11 posted 2009-07-15 06:21 PM

some things just seem sweeter left behind the veil afterall
very fine writing indeed

Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

12 posted 2009-07-15 07:22 PM

"lately I just miss myself"

I feel this way right now.

I love your work.

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