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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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we would lean on our elbows on ledges looking down at the sky below us pretending we were just trees there together in our forest of only two you said there was wind on your side and you leaned into me sometimes like a little girl pushing napkins into the toe of a woman's too big shoe and on other occasions you leaned away I guess so my eyes would know the rest of you other then what just seemed to fit together and you looked back at me often too as if knowing where I was looking would write your script for the next play and you would change your costume accordingly just by moving your eyes a certain way or moistening your lips before softly speaking _____________ daark |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
yes.. I can see this Mr Daark.. lovely as always ... RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"you said there was wind on your side and you leaned into me sometimes" I think the breeze was made just to lean women into you  |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms R&B, thanks lady friend ______________ ms suesea, then the breezes are a blessing, thank you babe...um...it is a bit drafty out here this am..care to come visit? |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I like this - it makes me think that sometimes we are luckey to be able to share the various parts of who we are. I'd hate to be alone the pieces of me unshared. If that makes any sense at all. A |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I am reading this gem while listening to "Diamante" by Zucchero Fornaciari and I find your words and his tune make for a very special moment within this day. Again every line a highlight ... how you do this! Love, Margherita  |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms ali-san, I suspect I should not respond to the pieces of you ....he said as she looked at him with a puzzled expression..yes I do understand, thanks little one ______________ ms mar, thank you for soiling your musical charms with my humble penscratching.. |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
interesting piece ... v. well written. sustained applause! |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
~dark... and you would change your costume accordingly just by moving your eyes a certain way ~love this...love all of it browneyes |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
2ndhand..thank you so very much _____________ ms browneyes, thanks ms |
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jbstillwater Member
since 2009-07-03
Posts 216Albuquerque, New Mexico |
loved it! Visual and enticing, edgy and sharp good writing! Jan |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
"you leaned into me sometimes like a little girl pushing napkins into the toe of a woman's too big shoe" ...this is so descriptively relatable...another gem... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You lean well... very well. You lean so well it makes one want to learn more.  |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms JB, humble thanks ms ______________ steavenr, thanks amigo _________________ ms sun, thanks babe, you always smile me |
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