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the orchids soul
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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that I am indeed lost in the canvas of this form so I watched the changes in you and me as if I were the souls edge where sea and tide rise -- where moon greets shifting star/s with the passing crumble of stone/s who will guide me to the 'rest' in nights while I drift on some winter storm awaiting each crystal to form her beauty I am as empty as the rose that tries to touch the rivers bend the season of air between palm and prayer the press of body between grain and sand where silence fills you so the rain will fall wet upon your lips drops of tin and stone and I will search for the dust of you in broken glass &breaking light to paint color on warmth of flesh and echo my vacant dreams to bury the grey of stone in the amber of my sleep to remind me how orchids cry and I am always within the shades of you between echo and dream the farewell ~~**~~ I never let one moment define me, I define myself by all moments and how they teach and touch me......02 |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"to remind me how orchids cry and I am always within the shades of you between echo and dream " gawd I wish I could write like you!!!!  this is SUCH a keeper  |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Greeneyes, you may FEEL "as empty/ as the rose/ that tries to reach the river's bend" but you ARE as full of talent that explodes beauty, soul, depth and feeling, as any human can be. Your work is always exquisite. We get to see far too little of it, but it is SOOOOOOOOO worth it when we do! I am sorry for your pain, but I am grateful that you have channelled it into SUCH art! Thank you for posting this. Owl |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
as a scientific and philosophic 'Universalist'; geologist; and 'Romantic', I can't help but love the imagery of this 'write' ... I am especially fond of: "as if I were the souls edge where sea and tide rise -- where moon greets shifting star/s with the passing crumble of stone/s who will guide me to the 'rest' in nights while I drift on some winter storm awaiting each crystal to form her beauty " AND that grand last line!: "between echo and dream the farewell" sustained applause for this 'penning' ! |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
~hey, greeneyedgrly  i love this: I am as empty as the rose that tries to touch the rivers bend the season of air between palm and prayer the press of body between grain and sand ~beautiful poem |
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unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477 |
Couldn't choose a fave if I tried. You render beauty with gossamer strokes. Gorgeous stuff. Heather |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
This is incredible, I feel unworthy to even make a comment. So I won't. lol I'll just read in pleasure. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: The whole poem pulses with emotion, drifting from your heart onto the ink and from there right into the perception of the reader. Exquisitely done. Love, Margherita |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Whenever I read a poem of yours, Dear Poetess, my blue eyes turn green! Your ink is liquid gold! ~ May I borrow a drop or two? Linda |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
quote: That is exquisite writing. I also enjoy your poetic structure. Such beautiful poetry. xoxoxo Alison |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
loved the title...sure NOT disapointed with the read...especially with lines like this: "to bury the grey of stone in the amber of my sleep " |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
thank you all for stopping by, so glad you all enjoyed this ramble.... hugsss and luv to all  ~~**~~ |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
just 'stopping by' for another read! continuing applause for this fine 'penning' !! |
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WTBAKELAR
since 2008-09-09
Posts 1089Utah, USA |
MOST BEAUTIFUL!!! But, That's to be expected from one as beautiful as you. Love your poems, (and your picture) and the way they make me feel, Pure, intense pleasureful bliss. Thank you for this treasure, Tracey. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Greeneyes - you are an artist supreme. This write is amazing... BC |
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