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Ethnographic Haiku
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Ethnographic Haiku |
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Johan Member
since 2009-05-13
Posts 88Lincolnshire, England U.K. |
Ethnographic Haiku's are the three senses in seven stanzas 7 Levels of a Gold Mine a hole in the ground see the Ward Leonard man cage drown in its darkness circle of blue sky disappearing as a dot fading away, gone fall as though flying hanging on a thinning thread hear walls rush past you damp sweat of terror holding the sides of the steel living rock, silence water damns dripping a torrent cascades all around falling in the dark six levels pass by slowing, the black gloom of stone eyes slowly focus stop, seventh level feeling, looking, taste the air a mile below earth. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
This is impressive. With every further level I felt like screaming stop stop ... so deep within the Earth, I always wonder how miners can resist. This is an incredible set of haiku. Very well done. Love, Margherita |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Okay, now that you've very adroitly and adeptly taken me all the way down  , could you now please bring me back up to that "circle of blue sky" again! Pretty please!Hmm, on second thought. It IS a gold mine! Perhaps I'll stay down there a bit longer and see what I can dig up!  Hi, Johan! Welcome aboard the pip ship! Giving you a warm, welcoming hug, Earth Angel  |
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Heart2Heart Senior Member
since 2009-05-15
Posts 738Scotland/Norway |
Fantastic haikus Johan, you were always a master! Katriona |
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jbstillwater Member
since 2009-07-03
Posts 216Albuquerque, New Mexico |
Geez Louise and Mother Mary, Johan...this is wonderful writing, indeed. ARtistic and great form. Dang good writing to be sure! Jan |
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