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Ennui |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana 
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I am dying a slow tortured death One more day removed from your breath Still there is nothing left here to do Just waiting with arms held out for you Time does not heal nor purify The sun penetrates not the sky Maybe if I put myself on the moon I can avoid this sickened swoon Becoming your very own sycophant Thinking of how you did so enchant Took possession of a starved mind And froze me somewhere in time There is still hope for me to hold onto yet So I will not seethe in what-if regrets As long as I breathe it’s never too late So here I remain in tortured wait |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
There is still hope for me to hold onto yet So I will not seethe in what-if regrets As long as I breathe it’s never too late So here I remain in tortured wait I like this very much but particularly love this last verse... you entwine agony and hope so very well!!! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You twine your name well with your place of birth, Sir.. I can hear now the long lonesome sounds of the river winding... be that as it may, this is a peculiarly lovely write.  |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
I, too, found the last stanza to be the best in a very good write...really like the message that it leaves for the reader... |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
i loved the whole darn thing...the emotion, the agony of waiting and longing...i know it all too well. ~I am the keeper of what he cast off~ |
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Nancy Hardin Member
since 2009-12-02
Posts 58Nevada, United States of America |
The loneliness, the agony of waiting, were expressed so beautifully. Thanks for sharing. |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
This was way back in the pages. lol Thank you Nancy. |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
beautifully expressed, yann |
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