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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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she did that restless thing with her eyes glance when I opened my hands and thumbed my front pockets she said I was too cocky and probably rude too I asked why she would even wonder what I was I remember her hand on my shoulder later on when I was by the music machine pushing buttons and she wanted her way as usual but didn't get it so she glared at me and pouted a woman's lip comment it was too loud for me to hear her mouth there but I did listen to her eyes and charms as they seemed to be becoming more apparant so I just asked if she wanted to get to it and she asked what kind of lady I thought she was I said it didn't matter if she was or not we could make the best of each other's flaws and try to get beyond the obvious imperfections she said the f word but waited in the parking lot _______________ daark (owgish) bike night diversion |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
we could make the best of each other's flaws and try to get beyond the obvious imperfections I absolutely love these lines... to watch them delivered would be worth the price of admission. *G* |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms suthern..thanks lady for grinnin in |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
and she wanted her way as usual but didn't get it so she glared at me and pouted a woman's lip comment ~wonderful description, dark... ~I am the keeper of what he cast off~ |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms browneyes, thank you so very much for the read |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
D So, I am reading along and loving this. Just leaning into the words and savoring each word and I got to this -- quote: ... and I laughed out loud. You know how I love to laugh - this is perfect. A |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms ali-san, thanks babe!! I always have been a laughmonger |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
intuitive ending...as if the work before it existed not only as a precursor, but as an integral part as well...good write...enjoyed (especially the ambiguity & humor of the last line) |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
steavenr..thanks guy..yes I will admit I did back into this one.. |
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