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the cool night air
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the cool night air |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
what relief the cool night air, like beds of ease in sky-palaces warm, offer the traveler weary and worn refreshing the soul, dissolving the care mystically, ethereally, magically as burdens lift like the morning fog that settles serenely on the rain-laden bog leaving a foot-print of morning's plea sand-swept tones in hushes of brown settling the soul like a fresh mown lawn clippings resting from dusk till dawn as sighs surreal regale simplicity's sound and the world hushes soft in the cool night air as its spirit sails aloft in the cool night air |
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Heart2Heart Senior Member
since 2009-05-15
Posts 738Scotland/Norway |
A nature poem beautifully penned just how I like it :-) A pleasure to read. Heart2Heart |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is lovely! *S* I especially like the closing couplet... beautiful! *S* |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I am here with my scooby ears up. "Ruh?" A sonnet, perchance? Do tell! I like the closing couplet particularly as well. (And hey--sonnets are on my list of things to not do, since I do not/can not scan. *pout*) But I love reading them!  |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
H2H, your comments are very kind and much appreciated...thank you so much...glad you found this a pleasure suthern, the final couplet was my only (at least in my mind) my only contribution to the poetry of this write thanks bunchesserenity, a sonnet? wellllll, a variant of a sonnet at least in rhyme scheme, but hardly in meter...I like to Lewis & Clark it when using a restrictive form...ya know? ...yeah, I think you know...I am honored by your commentary |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Oh, MY! your words allowed me to feel the breeze~ a gentle, just right, breeze, not too cold or hot, and the kind that has that certain smell to it, blowing softly across your face.... ~ARH  |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
There is something about sitting in the cool night air, that is so soothing to the soul. This is a beautiful poem. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
steavenr...you peel the paint off the stones and let them sparkle as gems with your pen.enjoyed it!! |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
ARH, thanks kindly for your nice remarks...glad you 'felt' the write...your comments certainly added reality to it OK Rose, yeah, refreshing and fully enjoyable...I liked your description of 'soothing to the soul'...that really captures the essence Dark, stop, now...please...your words are too much...he says while blushing...but, remembering to be thankful for such high praise |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hi Steavenr...refreshing words and vivid images brought harmony...Thanks for the poem. yann |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: Glad, that while diving, I came across this one, dear Steaven. It's ever so beautiful! Love, Margherita |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Reads like a summer nights dream, and you have captured so much in the cool breeze. Nice nice, poem~ |
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