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faeriemythc Junior Member
since 2009-06-18
Posts 40KY |
Nothing fractured heart, lost forever, rending it's way through nothingness, sending images into the void. can you see my thoughts, sifting through the debris of your chaos? all is lost, forever, into the night. why do you linger? just go my torment is your delight. your eyes devour everything, your appetite is voracious, your lust insatiable. you take greedily, giving nothing in return. your need is now futile, it no longer penetrates my heart. why do you linger? just go my strings are pulled to the beat of your symphony, forever tinged with your sounds. the crescendo, like waves upon a ship, beating, smashing, destroying. change the station, your song is over why do you linger? I'll go. aka Carmen |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
faeriemythc - felt the emotions in this writing, nicely done... BC |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
This aches ~ but your spunk and spirit and attitude are admirable!!! There are many quotable lines in your 'decree' lol ~ but this one is my favourite ~ "change the station, your song is over"~ Love that line!!! Wishing you well!  EA |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
~i love how this presents on the page! as well as the message it conveys...nice work. |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Woah! Powerful stuff here! you come across strong, knowing what you want, how you feel, and it is time to move on... like you are saying, get on with it! shew...been here and felt this one, you delivered it nicely, well I mean, strongly but nicely presented, lol! nice to see another southern poet! ~ARH |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
~ha! it looks just like a bee... lol |
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faeriemythc Junior Member
since 2009-06-18
Posts 40KY |
thanks everyone. I love to write, just never seem to get much time anymore. I appreciate you all looking at my stuff. |
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kindredspirit Member
since 2009-05-19
Posts 156 |
passionate and intense! i loved the lines, "my strings are pulled to the beat of your symphony, forever tinged with your sounds. the crescendo, like waves upon a ship," i really feel it. |
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