Open Poetry #45 |
hands, sill and gravel |
Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
we were just side roads, before the sun was up where you can still see around the bend into dark but feel the new eye day walking barefoot before the earth gets as warm as alive is our talk was small enough, for pockets to carry little words and minor sized laughing could be bread crumbs to follow back here someday if we ever lose the reason we left our highways we held hands before they made shadows on the ground so they would have enough time to seem natural before we saw ourselves this way the first time and then we looked at each other's eyes wondering why we had never been down this road before since we both had spent so many nights looking out of the windows next to another's back door that just seemed to open now to always been here with only our footprints on it's shoulders ________________ daark |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
you know, this makes me miss home so much... |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Ms Suesea they say missing something is better then having it sometimes? Thank you babe |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
In my constant awe of you and your talent, Dark. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
humble thanks CG.. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Again I experience this total impact of your poem, not just a line or two that stand out. No, you maintain intensity so high from beginning to end that its beauty becomes like a warm cloak to shiver within. Love, Margherita |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
~dark... our talk was small enough, for pockets to carry little words and minor sized laughing could be bread crumbs to follow back here someday if we ever lose the reason we left our highways ~you never fail to amaze me with your clever lines...enjoyed! ~browneyes |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms mar...thank you sweet lady friend.. ________________ ms browneyes, thanks for moving across this set of scribbles.. |
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unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477 |
yanno I first read this as have hands, will travel lol Loverly, D. H |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
just needed to read ya....always a pleasure... ~~**~~ |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms UBP..was thinking of handsel and grettle (sp) actually...kinda almost..thanks lady _______________ lady lauren, you always make me smile with you peek in, thank you |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Magic. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms ali-san, thanks babe |
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