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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace 
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Unaware breath caught me unaware I saw it stirring slowly in the distance dancing upon the grass bending the blades ahead it was like the smallest whisper a sound of sigh I wasn’t expecting its approach but I do believe in things I can not see then it touched me like an eyelash caress and held my skin in feather motion rippling my bones taking mine completely away for breath caught me unaware "I'm so hard to handle I'm selfish and I'm sad." — Joni Mitchell |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Oh brother - I swear I know this feeling. When a close friend died, I said to my friend, I can feel her like an eyelash across my cheek. Oh did I love this! |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I think we have all had this feeling, Helen. You express it so beautifully. Ida |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
You can sure write. I like this. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
An absolutely wonderful rendering of these things you don't see, but you feel. Now recorded in your awareness, and beautifully so. Love, Margherita |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Beautifully written, my friend. j. |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
Breathless... but I do believe in things I can not see then it touched me like an eyelash caress and held my skin in feather motion Beautiful. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I'm keeping this one.  It is poetic, profound and beautiful. |
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Ariana Senior Member
since 2000-10-08
Posts 571Orlando, Florida |
My Dear Lady Do you believe in Spirits?? That is exactly how a spirit comes upon you and moves you. I enjoyed your words. Ariana |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Helen - you are one great writer. Wherever you find words like this keep them coming... BC |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Gem quality! Caught me in the distance bending like the whisper sound of sigh I do believe in things I can not see It touched me completely unaware -just to have stolen a line or two- Love the work you do, Helen! (you wouldn't be telepathic, would you? umm - you don't need to answer that.) e |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
I think this is good enough to deserve a bump! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
And you take mine. *S* So very beautiful!! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Helen, such a delicate penning. I literally had little tingles coursing through my body. "I wasn’t expecting its approach but I do believe in things I can not see"    Linda |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms slick...you know I am aways in awe of your word play/heart play art. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I think this should be the first poem in your book  Bee-oooo-t-ful |
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