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viking_metal
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since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.

0 posted 2009-12-14 04:44 PM



I beat the sun like brass,
making three big bowls
bowls to catch water from those eyes.

With no water to be caught,
I dipped my beaten sun-brass bowls
dipped them into the sea.

I carried the sea for you,
placed it neatly in your lap
you told me I can't take this
I can't possibly take this,
don't even want it.

I took it back then,
drank every bowl dry.
Drank them dry and hurled them into the sky,
and roared red things
roared red things until they were the sun again.

________
Last installation of the Eyeball miniseries.
Paul

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

© Copyright 2009 Paul Weisbrod - All Rights Reserved
Margherita
Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
1 posted 2009-12-15 06:12 AM


Wow, dear Paul, I am very impressed. You are wonderfully creative ...

Love,
Margherita

viking_metal
Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.
2 posted 2009-12-15 10:13 AM


Margo with a twist of lime, thanks very much.
Paul

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
3 posted 2009-12-15 04:16 PM


Well what do you know? A part two?! Loved it.
This one tops the other one. What else do you got? lol
:superngrin:

ARCTIC WIND

MorningStar
Member
since 2009-10-26
Posts 290
Pittsburgh, Pa
4 posted 2009-12-15 04:40 PM


Wow, this is really beautiful and passionate.  It makes me want to read more!  Loved it.

Aenea

If I don't say it...who will?

viking_metal
Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.
5 posted 2009-12-15 06:07 PM


Arctic wind, there are three parts. They're all on the first page here on open poetry. Sunshine, Sunshine part DEUX, and Sunshine edition III.


Aenea, thanks so much. I appreciate it. I'm really glad you enjoyed.

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

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