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Open Poetry #45

The Voice Of Despair

A Beautiful Disaster
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since 2007-01-13

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0 posted 2009-06-09 12:27 PM

Triangles of half-open doors
Reveal all the truth that is hidden:
Just condoms and cans on the floor,
Black papers with verses, forbidden -
Unfinished remakes of the song,
Deprived of the right to speak loud
Of wicked intentions gone wrong -
Erasers have muffled the shout.

The only illusion-proof mind -
A poet, the voice of despair,
Sincere, the one of this kind
Throws verses far into the air
Right there, in a dirty old flat
Among once great talents, now rotten.
They all have deserved more than that,
But even their names are forgotten.

Grimnian
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since 2009-06-09

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1 posted 2009-06-09 12:35 PM

That flows really well, I like poems that have good metre and form, that certainly is the case with your poem.

Alison

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since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

2 posted 2009-06-13 10:33 PM

I love the images that you weave through a very well written poem. I am always happy when I come across one of your poems - I like them.

A

A Beautiful Disaster
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since 2007-01-13

Posts 409

3 posted 2009-06-16 05:04 AM

Thanks, I'm glad you appreciate it!

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