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viking_metal
Senior Member

since 2007-02-02

Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.

0 posted 2009-11-28 01:10 AM

I could make you smile
with my big heart jokes,
and my big lung laughs.
Never could I improve upon
the flawless form standing naked before me
tan and lithe, tenuous compared to my own -
searing my eyes with holy light.

I could feel the sex
through the skin covering your spine.
And in that moment,
we were in perfect white-
every tree branch laden with it.
The snow was pure and cold
but it didn't matter to us, as we were sweating hot
sweating hot bullets that dripped like molten gold.
They burned through my big chest
covering my big heart and big lungs
and burned big holes
bleeding me dry.

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Bad Habits.

Fall in love early, fall in love often.
Paul

I love my dog, and my truck. It's that simple, really.

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

1 posted 2009-11-28 01:18 AM

Reading you tonight kind of fills a big hole. I like this one too - but you know that. I am like your poetry groupie, trailing after you writing trite replies to good poetry.

A

viking_metal
Senior Member

since 2007-02-02

Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.

2 posted 2009-11-28 07:10 AM

Thanks Alaboo.

I love my dog, and my truck. It's that simple, really.

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

3 posted 2009-11-28 12:16 PM

check your email

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

4 posted 2009-11-28 12:20 PM

This is smoking hot, metal man!

Love your words of advice at the end also.
I read a bumper sticker the other day that said, "if not for love then why"

I like that, and this!

shalisadefa
Member

since 2009-08-13

Posts 114

5 posted 2009-11-28 12:32 PM

Yes I do read them!

Especially enjoyed 'tickle monster' and I thought that 'my favorite relationship' was sweet and although I didn't comment on 'there is God paint all over you' I thought it was a fine write.
C.

viking_metal
Senior Member

since 2007-02-02

Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.

6 posted 2009-11-28 08:58 PM

Blues Serenade, thanks yo.

I am really happy you took a liking to it.

Shaliboohama, dang! I didn't realize you'd read more than one poem here. I apprecciate your following my writing, and I will surely return the favor.

I love my dog, and my truck. It's that simple, really.

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