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This Diamond was Rough
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This Diamond was Rough |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere 
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I was stumbling amidst the darkness that had descended upon my life, Minding my own business and not particularly paying attention to anything but the tightrope beneath my feet, when a glimmer or glint of something caught the corner of my eye… Tired and weary from balanced footfalls, I daintily strayed from my path even though I thought it too soon to alter direction, And I tried to let that love light in though I still had miles of growth and valleys of pain to tread… But, because life had taught me to be wary of shimmering and magical things, I searched hard enough until I found the inevitable mar And instead of polishing that imperfection away, I cast the whole jewel aside believing it to be too tarnished to be of any value to me… ~~~~~~~ I let the darkness envelope me once again and walked a little further on, Not faltering, yet not finding any joy in aloneness or in judging and weighing hurts, So I hastily returned to where I had last seen that glimmer hoping so much to find that it was still there and unchanged and that I hadn’t foolishly wasted a chance to tuck it deep inside my soul… To my relief, I came upon it again, But I had to look several times to be sure that it was the same brightness because this time it appeared flawless and perfect, And when I let its light reflect on me shadows dissipated and I surrendered to his love… sr/1999 |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
awww...  this sure made me smile...surrendering to love is always good! |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Dear Brneyedgrly, there is an old adage that I think applies right here, "Alls well that ends well" and it sounds like it has ended well for you. Take care my friend. Lindsay |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
~thanks, sea... i agree... : ) |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
~always nice to hear from you, linds.... : ) thanks |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
This is beautiful. It mede me smile, remembering the time, when I surrendered to love. |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
But, because life had taught me to be wary of shimmering and magical things, I searched hard enough until I found the inevitable mar And instead of polishing that imperfection away, I cast the whole jewel aside believing it to be too tarnished to be of any value to me… This was very impressive and thoughtful storytelling. |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo dear Brneyedgrly, This is fairly good work. Is this two poems? Love Bobby |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: A matter of trust, indeed. You described this doubting attitude with great skill. Sweet is the surrendering ... Love, Margherita  |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
~sweet rose... i'm glad you liked it... and i'm glad that you got a chance to surrender to love... : ) |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
~thanks, jerry... i don't think it was impressive...but thoughtful, yes.... this story was about another one of those times that i prettied a man up with words...lol |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
~yo, dear bobby... what does 'fairly good work' mean? lol actually...this is not one of my favorite pieces, so be gentle with your constructive criticisms...k? no, it's only one poem...however i will be posting the second piece in this series to let you know what happened i feel like you are struggling with this one...try reading 'rita's take on it...she gets it : ) |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
~my dear, 'rita... "A matter of trust, indeed. You described this doubting attitude with great skill." spot on! ~hugs~ |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
This one is my favorite of yours, just in the style you told it, makes it so special.... I know what you mean, I walked these same shoes.... had to go back and dig a little deeper the next time around... rough diamonds hurt sometimes... ~ARH  [This message has been edited by A Romantic Heart (06-23-2009 10:57 PM).] |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
brneyedgrly - only a true romantic heart could write so touching a poem such as this one... BC |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
~yes, arh... rough diamonds can be dangerous : ) i must say that you are lovely inside and out, sweet girl...so glad you are reading thanks... : ) |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
~thanks, dear bc... for seeing my romantic heart : ) |
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