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Wrap Your Mind Around Me. |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. 
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The space between your ribs was clearly designed to fit my scarred fingers like liquid in a glass. Your spine moving and rolling, surrounded by woman-muscle and woman-flesh. The space between tenderness was clearly designed for me and you to make hazy pleasure memories. Your strange and beautiful eyes flicker with a moment's gasp the flame ignites and burns us both out. But only for the night. ____________________________________________ You Don't Have to Inhale Cigars. -P Thirty bits of glass had become my teeth, They were breaking each and every time I tried to speak. [This message has been edited by viking_metal (06-23-2009 06:21 PM).] |
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moonbeam
since 2005-12-24
Posts 2356 |
I can't believe you are the same poet from the old CA days, you've improved beyond recognition. This is a marvellous and enjoyable poem. Thanks for posting.  You should try your hand at this: http://www.guardian.co.uk/books/series/poetryworkshop |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"The space between tenderness was clearly designed for me and you to make hazy pleasure memories. " clearly  love it Paul... but the strange eyes part LOL reminded me of the cartoon movie, An American Tail, and he gives them the Crrrrrrazzzzy eye.... too awesome...  |
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unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477 |
Paul Seriously diggin' you here. Nice, Heather |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Moonbeam... Thank you. I like to pretend I've become something of a Poet from time to time. How do I enter? It looks like this months thing is over? My dear SEA... I LOVE THAT MOVIE... Oh, and thanks. A SPEE, A SPIE, A SPUH-DUH-DUH-DUH... AN ARACHNID!! Unbound... Thank you so very much. I'm really glad people are starting to take kindly to my poetry. I guess that means I'm getting better at the stuff. Thirty bits of glass had become my teeth, They were breaking each and every time I tried to speak. |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
~wow, paulie... is that the kind of stuff i would be missing out on by not coming to minnesota?? i may have to rethink this! lol ~seriously : ) |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Thank you Brown Eyes. I'm glad you liked it. -P Thirty bits of glass had become my teeth, |
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moonbeam
since 2005-12-24
Posts 2356 |
Yes Paul this month's is over. The next challenge will be up in a few days time if they follow the usual format. The standard is extremely high, several well know published poets have been doing it from time to time. |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Cool, I'm under qualified then. Haha. I'll give it a shot anyhow. Thirty bits of glass had become my teeth, |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
V_M Your poetry is cool! ~ & HOT!!! EA |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Thanks very much, mademoiselle EA. P Thirty bits of glass had become my teeth, |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
I liked the title, it caught my eye, and then the poem, just blew me away, deep stuff! ~ARH |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Thanks a lot romantic lady. Glad you enjoyed it. Thirty bits of glass had become my teeth, |
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