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Poetal
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since 2009-11-09

Posts 74
Texas, United States

0 posted 2009-11-09 05:53 PM

Feel my heart beating, inside my chest
It's truly going, 90 miles an hour
As it's protected, by my bullet proof vest
I'm so hot, would like a cold shower

Standing guard in Iraq, this warm April night
Thinking of home, and my precious dear wife
On the street, there's truly not much light
Wonder if tonight, I'll lose my life

All my thoughts directed, watching for bad guys
Knowing this uniform, a target for their attack
Wishing I could wear, any other disguise
So we could arrest, that wicked old pack

Maybe soon I'll be leaving, homeward bound
Get to see my children, three healthy boys
If I'm shot, truly hope my body is found
Hope to get home, and give my sons their toys

Wish that Mr. Obama, could call us home
That would surely be, a wonderful delight
He just needs to call, on the telephone
We'd be headed home, the very next flight

AL Inmon

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2009-11-09 06:47 PM

Welcome to Pip!

I think you rendered this soldier's emotions very well.

I too wish that soldiers could go home and that true peace might finally find its way into the hearts of all men.

Poignant.

Love,
Margherita

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

2 posted 2009-11-09 06:53 PM

Al, I knew by the title that this would make me cry. Very emotive. Touching. Welcome to Passions.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2009-11-09 07:05 PM

thanks for this

Balladeer

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since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

4 posted 2009-11-09 08:44 PM

Very nice sentiments, Poetal, ones we can all relate to.

Getting the syllable counts more in line and the accents in the right places would add greatly to the message.

A very appropriate poem for the upcoming Veteran's Day

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

5 posted 2009-11-10 11:49 AM

this is so human to love, no more to say, thanks for the poem and its message.

regards

yann

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

6 posted 2009-11-10 07:03 PM

Enjoyed these thoughts...James

LindsayP
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since 2007-07-28

Posts 3410
Australia, Victoria

7 posted 2009-11-10 08:07 PM

Thank you so much my new friend for this poignant heart touching poem. I feel for

you and all of your comrades too and I sincerely hope that you will all be able to

come home soon. Welcome to PIP. Good luck and God bless.

Lindsay

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

8 posted 2009-11-10 08:32 PM

A heartfelt write.
War is not nice, it hurts everyone.
Maybe some day humans will decide to be compassionate and loving,
not greedy and self-centered.
Then perhaps, wars will end.

Welcome to Pips.

[This message has been edited by Midnitesun (11-11-2009 09:34 AM).]

shalisadefa
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since 2009-08-13

Posts 114

9 posted 2009-11-12 01:47 PM

although very delicately phrased, I think these are the raw thoughts of all 'peace' soldiers in Iraq.

And you're so right. One call can make the difference.

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

10 posted 2009-11-12 08:59 PM

Al, Welcome to Passions! I read your Texas poem, so I can only guess at the welcoming not only your family will give you but the welcome that your whole neighborhood will have readied in store for your return.

Please check your email for a Very Special Greeting!

" It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love
~*~
KRJ

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