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Open Poetry #45

Two short ones...

oh_ok
Junior Member

since 2009-07-20

Posts 17

0 posted 2009-11-02 06:14 PM

[Neocrusade]
Hypothetically spotted
By a hypothetical enemy
While hypothetical corpses eat a hearty noon-time meal
And so it goes.
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[Plight]
Fun soon ends in a tragic sight
Clutching his throbbing ankle tight
Hindsight wishes, so
That his favorite super hero
Had not been one with the power of flight

SlowlyFallAway
Member

since 2008-08-29

Posts 279
North Carolina

1 posted 2009-11-03 10:54 AM

We can't all be like our superheros. Loved that last part.

AncientHippie
Member

since 2009-10-15

Posts 411
Surfing the Cosmic Flow

2 posted 2009-11-03 06:28 PM

oh_ok, I like the work in this couplet. It would appear to be two parts of an ongoing work: I certainly hope so, as I would love to see more of this bright, crisp style and 1337 content/context. Way cool.
Jim

"We are stardust: we are golden: and we've got to get ourselves back to the garden." --Joni Mitchell "Woodstock"

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

3 posted 2009-11-04 10:00 AM

Way cool!
Good to read you again.

Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

4 posted 2009-11-04 10:22 AM

Especially loved the second one-it made me chuckle.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

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