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AncientHippie Member
since 2009-10-15
Posts 411Surfing the Cosmic Flow |
Watching a relationship e r o d e is like drowning: flashes of the past flow before your eyes. With the knowledge of hindsight, you watch and recognise the failures, the weaknesses: the massing of the clouds that will (in a moment: in an eternity) obscure the sun. "We are stardust: we are golden: and we've got to get ourselves back to the garden." --Joni Mitchell "Woodstock" |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
And by the time you get the forecast, it's too late to avoid the storm. *S* Beautiful write! |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Love this very much, dear Jim. Words and presentation match your topic so very well and show your sensitivity. In those moments the obscuring of the sun seems to last eternally no doubt. Love, Margherita |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Jim, what a heart felt piece (ouch)been there done that. Good job~L |
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Dreamer05 Junior Member
since 2009-06-23
Posts 30Kansas |
Love the visual effect of the word 'erode'. It really makes you see it. ~Dreamer05~ |
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AncientHippie Member
since 2009-10-15
Posts 411Surfing the Cosmic Flow |
Suthern: Thank you. Sometimes the storm is a necessary catharsis. Margherita: Thank you so much. Fortunately, on occasion, eternity is only a very long and painful aspect of Now. Thanks, Lori: I hope you wear the T-shirt proudly! Dreamer: Thank you. I am glad your enjoyed the piece. Peace, and Namaste Jim "We are stardust: we are golden: and we've got to get ourselves back to the garden." --Joni Mitchell "Woodstock" |
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MorningStar Member
since 2009-10-26
Posts 290Pittsburgh, Pa |
Sometimes I wish life came with a do-over option cause it's true that hindsight is 20/20. This is beautifully written! Aenea |
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AncientHippie Member
since 2009-10-15
Posts 411Surfing the Cosmic Flow |
Thank you, Aenea, (interesting palindrome!)Life does come with a do-over option...it is called Time. Cheers Jim "We are stardust: we are golden: and we've got to get ourselves back to the garden." --Joni Mitchell "Woodstock" |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
How very true, Jim. I think you have learned a great deal from this lifetime. Enjoy your wisdom. Ida |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Ancient Wise One ~ I believe you to be one who learns from all of your life experiences and are able to translate that into wisdom which you share with others through your divine poetry!  Live & Learn ~ and Grow! ~ and Teach! EA   |
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ken206573 Member
since 2008-10-14
Posts 487 |
This poem is good. I think it's hard to see the coming storm when it comes to late. I also like how you formed it out as well.  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fine writing...James |
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AncientHippie Member
since 2009-10-15
Posts 411Surfing the Cosmic Flow |
Ida: At this age I cannot separate wisdom from experience. Thank you. Earth Angel: It is difficult to teach people about the importance of being in the Now. You, on the other hand, already Know. Ken and James: Thank you for your kind remarks. Namaste all Jim "We are stardust: we are golden: and we've got to get ourselves back to the garden." --Joni Mitchell "Woodstock" |
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