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Yoinn
Senior Member

since 2007-08-16

Posts 649
Michigan

0 posted 2009-06-20 12:06 PM

Bleed

If I could bleed for you,
quietly suffering in the night
until I could endure no more,
would it be enough.

If I cried for you,
spilling out my heart
here on this page
with a passion that
lives and breathes deep inside,
would you come back to me.

If I could close my eyes so hard
and raise my clinched fists so high
would God notice my torment
and bring peace to my soul.

How can I live
with only my memories
and still imagine that
I have a life without you.

How can love be so close
and yet never, ever
touch me.

Yoin

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

1 posted 2009-06-20 01:07 PM

This just had such an ache to it, I felt every word. Well done.

Carpe' Diem,
Mysteria

Yoinn
Senior Member

since 2007-08-16

Posts 649
Michigan

2 posted 2009-06-20 01:24 PM

Thank you Mysteria

As a general rule i don't ask questions in my poetry verse. lol I hide much of my ignorance tha way. This is a exception to my rule however. I thought the lines were strong enough to carry it. I however refuse to use question marks in any of my poetry. Not proper I know but aahh I very rarely get accused of being proper. lol

Yoin

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

3 posted 2009-06-20 07:04 PM

Lots to ponder in this.
Punctuation is optional (my opinion)
where poetry is concerned.

brneyedgrly
Senior Member

since 2009-06-08

Posts 1125
nowhere and everywhere

4 posted 2009-06-20 08:56 PM

~yo...

keep that compass pointing north, ya hear??

: )

Yoinn
Senior Member

since 2007-08-16

Posts 649
Michigan

5 posted 2009-06-21 10:37 AM

thank you Midnitesun for your reply

Yoin

Yoinn
Senior Member

since 2007-08-16

Posts 649
Michigan

6 posted 2009-06-21 10:40 AM

Yes I do browneyedone, I do hear ya. (answers with the north star shining in the window)

Chalmette Guy
Senior Member

since 2009-03-11

Posts 1257
Louisiana

7 posted 2009-06-22 08:57 AM

This was cool, and achingly heartfelt.
Also, a deep thought provoking write.
Much enjoyed.

Oklahoma Rose
Senior Member

since 2008-02-28

Posts 1586
Oklahoma USA

8 posted 2009-06-22 09:03 AM

I feel your pain, when I read this. That makes for a great poem.

Yoinn
Senior Member

since 2007-08-16

Posts 649
Michigan

9 posted 2009-06-22 04:35 PM

thanks Chalmette Guy

I always appreciate your replies.

Yoin

Yoinn
Senior Member

since 2007-08-16

Posts 649
Michigan

10 posted 2009-06-22 04:36 PM

thanks Rose.
Glad you like the poem. Sorry for the pain tho. I will post a lighter one so i can make up for it I promise. lol

Yoin

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